Evilness. I love the story and hope you update soon. However, just some advice, I may know what you said, because I understand a little Japanese, but most people don't, so it might nice to put in a translation of the word either in the text or in an A/N. However I did love the fact that you compared Shego to an oni, it is rather appropriate.
-Kate

ok. here's my review:

1. it isn't bad. but it isn't that great either. nana possible's reaction was a bit nonsensical due to the fact that she was suddenly quick to understand and forgive. a bit too quick.

2. kim's too ooc. shego's a bit ooc at times, but you kept her in character most of the time.

3. don't depend so much on the song. using the lyrics as sentences made your story really corny. it's a turn off.

4. don't be too formal in words. shego's not like that. kim's not like that.

5. some chapters tend to drag.

6. use past tense.

7. sentence structure.

that's all. it's decent but you need to improve a lot more.

i like it. more please

When's the next update? Soon I hope XD. This is great, it took me a good 2 hours to read but it was worth it. I like it how you make Shego the compassinate one and Kim the frightened one. It really delves deeper into thier emtions. Please write more. LL

wow that was intense! Please update soon!!

Yikes!
Just so you know I only got back today...Kinda lacking some sleep here...Dani is out for the count at the moment...I am heading there soon. Thought I would check my emails first though...sorry for not checking earlier but I had trouble gaining internet access while away...Would you still like me to check over that one you sent me still?
Well so you know I rather enjoyed this chapter...nice to come back and find it :) And I rather enjoyed the bantering... actually... I rather enjoy most bantering... I think I told you something like that before... Ok...well... hope to hear from you soon...Sorry this review is kinda weird...I need sleep...26 hour flight all together for the trip back...3 hours sleep...not good...
*Smiles rather strange like*
*Waves* Bye-Bye Nighty-Night! *Nearly falls asleep*
Sorry...*Hands Sugary Goodness over* Take Care My Dear!

Becky Silver Black

Not bad. It certainly is quite interesting here. Especially with Shego's mother and uncle abducting Kim so that they can have an interesting conversation. Although, I'm wondering if they made some of their threats just for their own amusement and weren't planning on following through with some of the threats that were made. And overall, it seems like you're getting better at keeping everything solid and not making it all too rushed. ^_^ Anyway, I hope to see more soon! ^_^

Hmm. I'm kinda getting the feeling that Kim was just wanting time away from Shego, not to have Shego leave for good. As everyone needs time away from each other every so often. Otherwise real problems would start to set in. Though, the part with Nana getting all upset about Kim being with Shego seemed a little off. As it seemed to just come out with hardly any thought on how to do it. Just mostly to me it seemed like it could have been done better, but that's just how I see it. Though, I'm wondering how things go from here. Anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

This story's awesome! But come on it's Shego even if Jack came back with a bulldozer she'd ram it up his ass before he could turn the key to the ignition!!

Great Chapters!!
Update Soon Son!!('Son' isn't literal)

ooh nice chap. love the bit with shego's mom and her bro. update soon.

APS,

The mood was set quite vivdly at the start of this chapter. You did a great job of telling about Shego's suicide attempt and Selene's 'poisoning'.

Did I miss something along the way, though?? One moment, James is telling Shego to 'save my Kimmie cub'. The next moment, Kim is meeting her parents. The moment after that, Kim and Shego are back together.

In short, what's the sitch?

Any enlightenment I can gain from your response to this question would be greatly appreciated.

Your friend in writing,

The Samurai Crunchbird

Well, I'm wondering how you're going to have Kim's grandmother react to everything. Though, I think that you changed the pace a bit much here. As things were moving fine, then they sped up a little when Kim was waiting to hear when the party was. Then again when Kim and Shego left the part. And if you had added a few more thoughts, then it wouldn't seem so much like Josh was taking advantage of the fact that Bonnie was in an emotional state and pretty vulnerable when he proposed. A little more dialogue and thoughts would have been really helpful there. Though, I was amused at Shego's comments towards Bonnie, with how everything that Shego said hit home harder than Bonnie expected. And how Shego was able to cow her with very little effort. But, it also had a nice flow to it. Anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

Nice start. Not really much to say, since it's at the start. And I'm kinda wondering what you've got planned for this, since it doesn't have the same kind of feel as the last one. Anyway, on tot the next chapter! ^_^

NO NO NO NO NO! u cant stop here u gotta update so update update update!

i can't believe that that just happened, for me emo chap, but i love it.
updater soon