This is amazing! I love Sirius and Nadia's attitude. :) I hope there is a sequel.

This is very sweet - bittersweet, actually, and even though I haven't read your other story, I can still feel the history and the love between Nadia and Sirius. Which is, uh, hard for me to admit, because I don't like to share my Sirius with other women. :D

Anyway, I really do like this. You've captured Sirius perfectly - serious!Sirius, that is, but those occasional glimpses of carefree!Sirius are priceless. I like Nadia, too. She seems like a really well-rounded character, and not at all Mary Sue-ish.

Fabulous, darling! :)

- Bella

Wow. Excellent story.
That was really well crafted and a very good idea!!

please continue this story!! it';s so so great!!
cupcakes,
Lilia

:) tht was really nice.

AWESOME! Very powerful writing!

keep it up!

Hey there mah twin! I was just going back through the challenges to review those I didn't. Anyways, nicely written; your OC is almost reminiscent of you and well developed. Congratulations on winning the challenge; for once you make me proud. xD

I think I'll read some of your fics now and see how Sirius is faring. ;)

Ciao.

(Psst--see? I can be civil sometimes. xD)

omg, it nearly made me cry. That's just so sweet...
well done!

x

By far the best in the entire competition...well, sure, Ihaven't read these others, but still How could they possibly be better than this?1 :D
Kind of reminds me of Atonement, don't know why.

I really really like that.
Awesome, awesome, awesome.
:)

MJ-

It’s always interesting to read stories about the lesser developed characters in a fandom. The idea, of Sirius being in love and trying to be noble about it, is an interesting one. I wonder what he thought as the years passed and he still sat imprisoned?

As a few folks of said, I do have a quibble about the ministry being unaware of their relationship, especially if she was sporting an engagement ring.

Good luck with the challenge.

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I like this story. The star-crossed lovers theme fits the fandom well enough, but the OC is under-developed. Please tell us more about Nadia, about what she does and why she and Sirius are so attracted to each other.

Please also tell us why the Ministry is unaware of her relationship with Sirius, when he was supporting her at her father's funeral, a public event. I would like to know more about Nadia's job, and how it affected her relationship with Sirius.

Good luck in the challenge. :D

I liked this, your OC is believeable indeed.

Scary though, cause my name is Nadia and I kept thinking someone was talking to me. But I'm not that important. ;)

Favourited.

I think this is a very good attempt at an OC. It's obvious your character has a fair bit of history with the CCs and you work that nicely into the story without making it sound like a history lesson. The flow, pace and structure of the story are nice. I like the ending with the ring. I think it's a really nice touch.

Three bits of crit I'll add:

1) Put the memory sequences in all italics so readers have a clean break between past and present.

2) I don't really get how the Ministry INTELLIGENCE wouldn't know one of their members was friends with Sirius. It seems unlikely to me, but maybe I'm missing details from your larger fic.

3) I thought the conversation between Sirius and Nadia was kinda sappy. I'm trying to picture my husband and I having it and I just can't see it.

Overall fine work.

*sob* it made me so sad! Because I love Sirius and to see him... you know... in jail, and not able to be well... free, (I guess that's the point of jail huh?) It was very heartbreaking. But you wrote it well. I suppose your goal was to make me feel as the character feels. And you accomplished it well. So, lovely job, (even though it made me sad...)