Reviews for A Whisper in the Dark

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HarunoRin 2008-08-18 ch 11,	abuseNaru's back to his old self sigh... oh well... maybe the date will happen in England. Oh will Naru's parents be making an appearance? ^_^
Ayjah 2008-08-15 ch 11,	abuseugh flying freaks me no matter what! I like that you do have her questioning the effect of Echo... Naru is a tough nut to crack is he not?
luna-moongoddess 2008-08-15 ch 11,	abuseit was a good chappy and i look forward to the other, i think i'll like the next 1 better.. good story though
meri47 2008-08-15 ch 11,	abuseVery good, even though it was very short. keep up the good work!!
Gabryell-P- 2008-08-15 ch 11,	abuseGood plot, I liked it. Hope you'll update soon. Bye =)
Gabryell-P- 2008-08-15 ch 3,	abusewell, I didn't say anything ^^" The mystery of John is resolved and Ayako is here... sorry =D Anyway, it was a good chapter with super-Mai =) Bye
Gabryell-P- 2008-08-15 ch 2,	abuseGood story, I liked it. But I think it's Ayako, not Ayoko, am I wrong? And where is john? He was in the helicopter, but you didn't say in which room he is...
ecyoj06 2008-08-15 ch 11,	abuse"Ecyoj06 - -insert innocent whistle here- I’m not hiding anything…nothing being hidden here…lalala." really...(coming closer to you to look straight in your eyes) I wonder... -mumbling- maybe i'll ask Lin to do something about it... I'll tell him you're trying to trick them and put mai in danger... anyways... nice chapter... it's like a breather of some sort
Senko Ryu 2008-06-20 ch 10,	abuseI wonder if Echo has a little crush on Mai? (or at least an ulterior motive involving her?) 1.She played the part of his beloved in the dream. 2.When Masako and Dr. Morris were attacked, Echo didn't help. 3.Echo put moves on Mai (using Naru's appearance...but still) 4.Echo possessed Mai even though Masako was baited out for the purpose of being possessed. 5.Echo had Mai avoid Naru's advances (not sure whether to laugh hysterically or pout on that one) 6.Echo's rather suspicious knowledge and chosen name You would think Mai would be more wary, especially after all the dangerous cases she's been through. But I suppose that's one character trait that will not change anytime soon. I look forward to seeing what will happen next. Oh, and I hope you and your hubby enjoy your time together. (But by your tone it doesn't seem that will be a problem XD)
markyc58 2008-06-15 ch 3,	abuseI read the diatribe on your bio to the reviewer who, apparently, pointed out some 'problems' with your story in a very IMPOLITE way; I'll try not to be so harsh, but I have noticed that you have a trait in common with quite a few writers out there, and that is using words that sound the same, but don't have the same meaning in regards to how they are being used in the sentence. Example; 'sense', as in 'the five senses - taste, touch, hearing, smelling and seeing' and 'since' which has regards to time - “No one has come to this area sense [should be 'since'] the basic construction and there weren’t any problems then.” There is also 'breath' and 'breathe'. 'He took a breath' and 'he managed to breathe deeply'. I hope this doesn't sound like nit-picking; I don't mean it that way. It is just very disconcerting to be so engrossed in a story [as I was yours] and then come across something like that -- it is like being hit with a bucket of ice water, which brings you back to reality and away from the story in a very abrupt manner. I don't generally find stories that can draw me in so deeply that I leave the 'real' world behind; your writing is very good and your storyline very original -- plus you have the characters personalities down to-a-tee. I only want to see it become better in the future. I look forward to reading many more stories to come.
luna-moongoddess 2008-06-05 ch 10,	abusei like it
meri47 2008-04-23 ch 10,	abuseFantastic Work! Update really soon!
Starlight - Wild Koneko 2008-04-15 ch 10,	abuseHmm, interesting indeed. Anyways, I'm looking forward to reading more, it seems this story just keeps getting better.
midnights-dawn 2008-04-07 ch 10,	abuseWow! Cool fic! I just read it from the start and I really like it. Please Update Soon!
miss koneko 2008-03-15 ch 9,	abusesorry for being so slack! i try to make a point to at least leave a short review to say thank you to the author for all their hard work, but i often read updates while i'm eating my breakfast and about to head out the door for work. (if i don't have enough time to review straight away, i usually come back and do it, but i've been lazy lately...) you're story is completely awesome, and as such, should be showered with as many reviews as possible telling you so :) thank you for the read!

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