 Alley-Oop 2008-02-16 . chapter 1Aw. This story would be squeal-worthy, were I the squealing type. However, I'm not, so I won't. But it was very, very adorable. I loved it. |
 Laney 2008-02-15 . chapter 1 It was cute at some points, and I really don't want to discourage you, but in my opinion, this post was kind of rushed I guess. There was this glaring typo that you made which was 'merry'-- (remided me of christmas :P) and this fic was very, very cheesy, or in better terms cliched. I'm not trying to say that you shouldn't write them anymore, but I think what I really meant was that your word choice and all seemed very typical and sucky (sorry. TT).
Have you ever read those everyday typical stories that you knew exactly what the characters were going to say at the end and you find out you were near right after you finish reading it?-- yeah this is how your story was kind of like.
I'm sort of an avid reader of yours and I found it very strange that this one-shot came out like this. ( IT WASN"T BAD!! not at all)
But since its a Valentine's fic and its suppose to be 'cheesy' (am i wrong?) and happy-go-lucky, I somewhat find this story very acceptional^^
Anyway, on a lighter note, I really liked how you began your story and the gift sharing between the two and all, and I look forward to more of your works.^^
(cuz I'm a crazy FAN!!lol) |