i know this is a self-insertion... but i think the whole thing is too overwhelming to be funny... at first the humor and irony is interesting and quite funny, but as it goes along, it doesnt give that effect anymore. the plot is slightly original, but the description/language comes too strong and too 'commanding' in a sense that one would like to ask the question as to why have the gwing boys over if they'd just serve the purpose of being an "over-embossed extra"? too many dialouges clutter the story, try to be slower in describing events and surrounding. blend speaking lines with descriptions rather than taking them separately.

i admire your fantasy...

Hehehehe, I was the hero! Yeahh! Thanks Amy, I just love the image of me piloting a gundam! Majorly cool! Keep on writing!

Man, this is TOOO GOOOD! Dude, you have to write more! MORE!)

Hahahaha, that was great Amy! Write the next chapter!

Funny! I want more!

Okay, continue please! This is real funny and original! (how original? i dunno how come o one else though of the gwp coming out of a tv?)

UHm... okay... Not my type of story, so I'll just shut up.

what happens? i wanna know! write more

hehe, pretty good, (too much description on the clothes and whatnot, a little unnecessary)_ I'm not Jewish, but Happy Rosh Hashanah to all!