|Reviews for Definition|
| psycochick32 12/6/09 . chapter 1
Oh yeah, that's right! More praise-singing from one of the most ramble-y reviewers ever to review!
It makes me hope you get these e-mailed to you. I know how much fun it is (well, to me, at least) to wake up to a bunch of reviews - especially for old pieces that you wonder if anybody reads anymore.
_ If you enjoy getting a review even a tenth as much as I do, then I feel happy for making you a bit happy.
Anyway, that's not the point of a review, so let's get on with the reviewing, shall we?
To begin with - Yay for this being a high school fic! They're so much fun to write and it's a blast to compare and contrast the way you write these two in high school as opposed to as adults. I know I say it in just about every review, but I can never get over how *realistic* you make them. They have faults, they have their positive traits. You embrace them all and that makes you one of my favorite writers of all time.
I really enjoyed this one-shot because it starts out with Tommy (who we always see as being so confident) nervous, worried; he's unsure about what happened and therefore doesn't have a real game plan in fixing things. It's very endearing to read and drew me in right away.
This is going to sound weird, but I enjoy the little details in your fics that tie them together. The hot potato chips is something that sticks out to me - it gives me a sense of making these fics more canon than fanon, you know? I often read your "ten years later" stories and kind of think of your high school ones as being a part of the same universe.
The banter, as always, is fabulous. I love Kim's needling as "penance for her tears."
That being said, there are a few things in the realm of constructive criticism to point out. I hope you don't mind and that you aren't offended when I toss out less-than-stellar comments; I've always been one to give well-rounded reviews when possible!
First - he refers to her as his Crane... very sweet, but they're not near the Ninja evolution of their powers, especially if this happens just after White Light. Is he referring to her being graceful anyway?
Random note: it's "chivalry" rather than "shivery." There are a couple overused commas, a few misplaced - nothing I would have noticed if I wasn't such a rampant grammar nazi (and that being said, I admit I'm misusing punctuation all over this review, LOL)
Despite the little things there, I love this. I love just about everything you write. Please, please never leave this fandom - I would be lost without your fluff (and angst, and comedy and the amazing AU you're writing that I have read and now need to review every bit of).
| Animegod 197 8/26/09 . chapter 1
Love the funny exchange at the end! This is a great Tommy/Kim fic.
| Itachi's aprentice 10/5/08 . chapter 1
A young love, but their is true love.
| Magical Meerkat 10/2/08 . chapter 1
Ahh loved it. it was brill
| I Danced Once Upon A Dream 6/8/08 . chapter 1
That was so very sweet! I loved it! You did an awesome job! Great story!
| slytherensangel26 5/15/08 . chapter 1
yes...i just love fluff! woot!
| Tink508 3/25/08 . chapter 1
this was really cute. But it's "chivalry" not "shivery" haha
| psav2005 2/21/08 . chapter 1
| PinkRangerV 2/20/08 . chapter 1
LOL. Tommy so deserved that. Keep it up!
| jps1926 2/18/08 . chapter 1
Cute one shot. It' amazing how this situation is similar to That Was, Then, yet it's so different. And you still manage to pull us in and captivate us. Thanks.
| GracefulCrane 2/18/08 . chapter 1
This story was so cute. I truly loved it.
| Enigmaforum 2/18/08 . chapter 1
Can I please just say...aw? That was sweet, cute, adorable, and just made me smile. It was truly a great TK fic that showcases how wonderful they were together. thank you for such a lovely piece of writing.
| Pink-Green-White-4ever 2/18/08 . chapter 1
*glomps and huggles*
Thanks big brother! Definitely made me cry, made me giggle, made me smile, and made me mushy! I appreciate the cheer up!
More fluffy TK moments please? *puppy dog eyes and pouty lips*
| Cranelove 2/18/08 . chapter 1
That was just what I needed after a week full of stress. A very sweet T/K moment. Perfect. Thanks for that )
| CathyD 2/17/08 . chapter 1
Aw... Shawn this was great! Once again you deliver with the good stuff. Even though you wrote it for Melissa, thanks so much for sharing it with us too!