So is Talon kel?

This sounds like it is off to a great start! Keep it up!

pleas rewite soon

um...POW changes? isn't it POV? or does POW stand for something that i have no idea since i'm new to this site? cause i know that POV stands for point of view...does POW stand for point of wierdness? point of wax? point of waning? DO TELL!
or you don't have to, heck i could just be over reacting and you had just spelled it wrong accidentally, thought i find that hard to believe as the W and the V aren't that close together on the keyboard...sorry, i'm over obsessing aren't i?
sorry 'bout that, i can "occasionally" get too worked up about something and then have to be emabarrassed over getting worked up then having to apologize OVER and OVER!
but no worries!
...i'm rambling...sorry...i'll stop...maybe...hehe
oh well, i guess i'll just have to content myself with asking you to update soon because i like this story...though you COULD use jus' a little more detail, i got confused sometimes about how the story was progressing and it scared me...jus' a little!
so anyways, i can't wait for further chappys!

-the bug is out!

i will not lie,
this story is slightly confusing,
and im not stupid when it comes to reading cmprehention- tho no matter wat i still cant spell oh well- but other than that i think you have a good plot.
but
you need to make the chapt longer!
and not with authors notes

im not trying to be mean so please dont be offended,
freckles rule

thanks for updating! this was great!

This is a good story! I loke the story line and I can't wait for more! Good luck with your writing!
~Smile!~

UPDATE SOON! It's so good! Loved it.

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx

MUCH BETTER. I don't necessarily like the way its broken up, but it flows much better-in fact I don't think it seems rushed at all now. The only change I would recommend it watch your she's and he's after breaks.
"Looking up, she noticed Ky..."
Since its after a break we can't necessarily assume that 'she' is Kel...

"Looking up, [Kel] noticed Ky..."

Blame my 8th grade and college English Prof's not me. I use to do that a lot and after a-many conferences about getting better grades on my papers my earlier weaknesses now stand out like sore thumbs in anything I read.

Now after reading it like 6 times, the way its broken up doesn't bother me as much. Break it up as you like :)

thank you for clearing that up, so the reason kel could get there was because she had wings at the time...

please update soon!

that's so ironic! anyway, update soon!

Interesting so far. Be careful you don't try to rush each chapter

yeah, you spelled it right!

but i am a little confused on why you went from the previous chapter them going to spar at her nest to a chapter of reflections (which is still good) but it was a little random!

please update soon! i can't wait for more!

aw. this chapter is so sad!! I read what you have so far and its good, though the kel/talon part is confusing me a little. and just a hint, if you allow anonymous reviews you will get more. ::wink wink::

Aw, how sad...
"how 'muck' her parents missed her"? Oh well, it's only a typo but I thought I'd show you anyways...It was really good.

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx