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| MisoGirl 2008-04-10 ch 2, | abuseThis chapter was insanely long . . . |
| MisoGirl 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuse. . . update. |
| Allura Arwen 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseAw! I love fics like this! At first you started off in present tense and then changed to past tense, so you might want to go back change it to the tense you want to use (present or past). Writing a story in present tense is hard, but it can be done. Very few people can do it successfully, but if you're wanting to write it all in present tense then go for it! ^_^ It just depends on your preference. The only other thing I can think of is don't insert notes right in the middle of the story like the "in short they're in the garden." I say this just because it interrupts the flow of the story. Other than that you've got a great start! Keep up the great work! -Allura Arwen |
| prettygirl17 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseGreat start! Lol. Poor Chrono. I really like it. Can't wait to see your next chapter! Hope Chrno figures out why she's so mad. |
| PaCT 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseoh, wow. Now this is interesting! Great start, it was a bit confusing though--with some grammer issues--but it wasn't too bad. Update! |
| snekochan 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abusePoor Chrono- Rosette can be so mean. ^-^ I did find the chapter a little confusing, and there were some grammatical issues, but it was funny. I liked the profiles at the end too!! It should be funny to see them working out their gender issues. ^-^ I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Love to live and live to love Snekochan |