Well, I thought the ending was sweet. You did well with portraying Paul and Jesse.

Absolutely wonderful, even if she does die. :)

that story was really good ☺☻

Bloody hell, I'm so annoying. That is to say, in my efforts to press the review button before i started reading so I could review along the way, I ended up seeing the words "They Died Happily Ever After."

WHAT IS THE MEANING OF THIS?

It had BETTER be bittersweet, Mister! Or you are in *big* trouble.

Okay, I'll read now...

By the way - LOVE the title, hahaha.

Cabbage, cabbage...what fairytale was that again? I remember one about stealing cabbage or something... *brain hurts*

Reading now.

Oh yeah. Had I READ your A/N, I might not have just made an ** of myself. Of course, that's the beginning of Rapunzel! :D Yay! Okay, reading now. Seriously.

["Don’t be ridiculous; what kind of disgusting parent names her child after a plant."] - Rofl! I believe you just insulted every Rose, Lily, Petunia, Daisy and Lavender out there. Nice one.

But seriously. Rapunzel really is one of the ugliest names ever.

[for to eat so much cabbage while pregnant affects children. It gives them the ability to see the dead.]

*regrets never touching the stuff*

[“But you’re mine, Simon. Don’t you know? You were mine since before we were born.”] *swoon* Oh, lah...hot AND betrothed...

[A large bed with black silk sheets.]

o.O

...Whoa. Dude. He means business.

I dunno why, but I really loved these sentences. They were very well written, and sounded very pretty to read...

[While her captive had golden brown hair, this guy’s hair was as black as ink. Where her captive’s eyes sent icy blue dread down her back, this guy’s chocolate browns filled her instantly with comfort. While her captive was most assuredly alive; this guy was dead.]

Gah! You keep going it. Writing ridiculously lovely sentences, I mean. [His death was but a shadow to his life, and though he had known this girl for only a few moments, he suddenly felt as if his life would be but a shadow of today.]

HAhaha! [“Ladies actually wear such devices?”] Undies...a device...whodathunk?

Jesse: "Device? What function do they serve?"
Suze: "To reveal as much as possible."
Jesse: "Oh."
*blink*
Jesse: "Demonstrate this device for me...?"

*laughs at own hilariousness*

[She spit. “Go to hell!”
“Such vulgar words from a princess.”] - HAHA. Nice.

*enjoying this story a little too much* You've hit my love-of-damsels-in-distress-and-wicked-men nerve right on the head. Oh dear...

[Her eyes were still hazy and her lips were swollen from his assault. He was a blackguard; a cad; worse than that even, because he was a coward.]

Pfft, Jesse. Assault? Bahaha! And the Drama Queen Award goes to...

*has occured to me just now* This is a REALLY good plot, lol. Like, it was a great use of the Rapunzel plotline I mean.

[“Let’s give your little ghosty a show he will never forget."] WHOA! Ouch, Paul!

[“You saved me from him . . . you saved me from something that would have been a thousand times worse than any death ever would have been.”] Whoops. *feels guilty about Fice* Well, I feel like a bit of a **, now. Bahahahahhaa.

Aww...that was so sad. :( But so happy. It WAS bittersweet. *glad* You really are a fantabulosteriffic writer, Ms. C. Rose.

*scores*

All right, I think I'm about done here...

- Lolly.

This is so pretty! Yes, a story can be pretty too.

I like the conversations and Jesse is super-sweet in this. I really like him. And the last line is just nice.

Great job, Sandra :D

:D

That was great! You had the perfect balance; not too cheesy, not too sweet- all the characters had their personalities...

I LOVED the fact that Jesse found out he was very likable... :P

And the ending line was perfect!

Fantastic job!

char

Well that's one way for a happy ending...

Excellent.

Brilliant XD

Especially the ending!

this was really cute! I'd never read a happy ending where the main people die... nice job.

That was really good. Darn you fabulous writers!

You know what my favourite bit was?

"Oh, my beautiful Rapunzel let down your long hair."

..."Go to hell!"

"Such vulgar words from a princess."

That really made me laugh. I'm not sure if that was your intention, but you know... :-D

And the ending was so cute! I kinda liked it that they ended up dead. And They Died Happily Ever After. Very clever :-P

Mil