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| uchiwasasuke79 2008-03-21 ch 4,  | abusei like the way you describe the fighting scenes. as for your grammar, try not to use the wrong word. for example where you said 'buy' you should have used 'by' and the first time you used '**' i think you meant to use 'as' not sure about that one though. keep up the good work. your grammar and writing skills will get better as you keep writing, so don't sweat it. |
| uchiwasasuke79 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abusenice start |
| Noble Wielder 2008-03-17 ch 5, | abusevery good please continue |
| pockymarawr 2008-03-15 ch 5, | abuseBravo. PS! It would be Axel's THRID chance, not second lol, hes a very bad boy. |
| pockymarawr 2008-03-09 ch 4, | abuse“Hey sora, kairi, and guy… who is… uhm… there friend… o.O” he said as he looked at riku. I almost fell out of my chair laughing at that. Hehe. I like this chapter better than the other ones its sounds more naturally written. If that makes any sense. Vut just a note. When your writing for Saix keep in mind how cool his demeanor is, he's relaxed yet yeah, understand? Like for example if you were writing for Xigbar he uses a lot of sarcasm, whilst Marluxia is incredibly flamboyant. If you havent played CoM I can tell you about the organization members in that one, personality wise. Mm 'n' what Xiggy said there sounds like a Marly/Demyx thing too me. but it works :P Not that I stay in character, but i would if the story i was writing wasnt an AU. Yknow? Wow Long comment. Muchly sorries for that =D |
| pockymarawr 2008-03-05 ch 1, | abuseThis is pretty good, but the dialog seems a little forced, try to write more relaxed. Goiod luck. |
| Noble Wielder 2008-03-03 ch 3, | abusehow do you feel about having only two reviews? keep up the good work |
| Noble Wielder 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abusei love reading fans sequels, please continue with the good work |