Wow a very unique way to get these two together!

Holy Hannah! This was a great story. The Labyrinth is one of my favorite movies. I haven't ever read a Labyrinth fan fic before but somehow this caught my attention and I'm glad I read it. It is so good and creepy enough... its actually believable! You wrote it so well. I think you captured the whole love scene and described it wonderfully. I could actually picture everything in my head. This is seriously one of the best fan fics I've ever read. You're a great writer. Don't ever give up on it. You've got amazing talent. Even if you just write fan fics. I think that this is believable enough that it would be so cool if it were to become a movie. Like Labyrinth 2 or something. It would make a great addition to it.

Yours Truly,

~TwilightGamer~
a.k.a.
~Sarah~
(no wonder I like the Labyrinth so much) LOL.

Simply amazing! I´m looking forward other Labyrinth story :-)
You´re excellent writer!

Awesome fic! i love it!

Wow, great story. :) Sarah's dark side reminds me of mine haha

This was a very interesting, and cool chapter that you have written. Have a good day tomorrow. Keep smiling. :-)

That was lovely! I enjoyed the struggle between them, and Sarah's dream was great. I noticed a few little spelling and punctuation issues but nothing major. A very sweet ending, too. Thanks for sharing!

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that's the end? *pout*

I really like the beginning of this story! I also like where it is going! You set the plot up very well, I look forward to reading more! :D

this is freaking amazing!

i'm definitely reading your other stuff now...

love much, keep writing, and may the force be with you

Well i definitely want more!

Please?

Loved it!

Holy crap, this is good! You've got textures down and great pacing.

Wow. I do believe you have a master piece to put onto Fanfiction. I found no errors what-so-ever, and that lends itself to the feeling of completion. I really enjoy how you play Sarah as herself, keeping her actions in line with her character and personality, but also allowing for what time would change or slightly alter (her reactions to her step-mother). And I assume that Jareth was free to begin with, but it was Toby walking into Sarah's bedroom where the picture is was what triggered the reaction.

Oh! I remember reading this a million years ago! It's still a good story even even after all this time. :)

wow, this was really good...i cannot wait until the next chapter!