This is very nice!

You've done a very good job:)

Aww...how sad. Loving the imagery! _ awesome awesome! It must be terrible to lose him like that poor Izayoi

I love how you wrote this in the traditional style of Japanese poetry. You've captured Izayoi's feelings for her son and lover very well, and hope you continue write more fics as good as this one.

Izayoi had a hard life, and so did her son. Sad. Bittersweet. Perfect.