Reviews for Partners in Crime

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Night Xiniall 2008-09-24 ch 12,	abuse:D Ooh, ooh! The lawyer's gonna b Zexion! ^ ^ Aw, jeez, dude. You HAVE to update! Next chapter=need! XD -NX.
Penguin In Love 2008-09-17 ch 12,	abuseoh nice :3
Sudden Change of Heart 2008-08-27 ch 4,	abuseThe pace is a little uneven, but the overall effect is really good. There's a nice mix of silliness (those lines of Axel's truly are dreadful - the Titanic one made me wince) and considered motivational stuff here; I particularly liked that Axel gets into the "someone needed and wanted his help… But he needed to help Roxas. He didn't want to get anymore involved than that" vs simple lust dichotomy. It's a nice dilemma, that one :) I spotted one typo: "walking over to wear Roxas was stepping out of the car". While Axel wearing Roxas is a pleasing image, I guess you meant 'where'.
xSakuraCherryBlossomx 2008-08-22 ch 12,	abuseomg im gonna sound like such a baby but im actually crying from reading the ending of missing you! (don't know if you realised but missing you is the name of one of the soundtracks from kingdom hearts :3) Seriously i have tears in my eyes and my sister is giving me weird looks fromthe otherside of the room T_T You HAVE to finish this or i think i'll cry. Even more. lol. I don't mind if they go to jail, as long as they have a gorgeous reunion at the end :3 Omg for your first lemon that was EPIC. Im trying to get the guts to write lemon in my akuroku fic, since everyones like "you have to write hot lemoney goodness NOW!" Lol well done and I hope you keep writing forever
Useless Uke 2008-08-21 ch 12,	abuseWee! I likes This One, I Knew That Riku Was going To Be The Surprise Guess. I'll Be Rotfl If Luxord Is the Lawyer! Continuee =D
Useless Uke 2008-08-20 ch 3,	abuse=) I Like This. Onwards!!
Axel.VIII-Roxas.XIII 2008-08-19 ch 12,	abuseAwuh ;3; I cant wait for the next chapter~ Hopefully you can work out the problems and post it. I really enjoyed this greatly Waiting for more
Axel.VIII Roxas.XIII 2008-08-19 ch 11, anon.	abuseI adore this story. I hope you can work the kinks out of it~ Its a very interesting Idea. I am sory but I dont know what to say, Since you're a better author then I. Love this Fic. ~Axel.VI Roxas.XI
Axel.VIII-Roxas.XIII 2008-08-17 ch 7,	abuseO I hated you until i read that last bit. XD I was like D: NU! But you saved the day with the lil' slut passin out. ;D good job~
Sudden Change of Heart 2008-08-17 ch 3,	abuseStill enjoying this alot. It is pretty funny, and for some reason the idea of Roxas being called Tim made me laugh a lot. I like all the uncertainties R has - who means what, who likes what. Keeps it interesting. Good stuff.
Sudden Change of Heart 2008-08-12 ch 2,	abuseThat actually made me burst out laughing. I love your Axel, he's such a git. I have no idea where this is going to go, but I'm enjoying the ride immensely. I really can't do humour at all - my stories are all doom and gloom - so thanks for a fun one that's actually any good.
Sudden Change of Heart 2008-08-11 ch 1,	abuseI'm late to this story (and to you, sadly - I just found your page through Sowing Poppies), so so far I've only read this first chapter. I really like it. It has a deftness about it which is pleasing, and you have made both characters real with very few strokes, and without any of that "the spiky blond teen pinned his piercy blue eyes on the flaming flame-haired flamey flaming flamer flaming back at him" thing that ruins so much AkuRoku. There are one or two little grammatical peculiarites that you may or may not care about, but what I wanted to comment on really was your request at the end about how to add more detail. My advice would be - don't. It's really easy to overdo description, and one of the things I liked very much about your story is your lightness of touch. I KNOW what Axel's apartment looked like, from two lines of text. I know how they're both dressed, what kind of characters your versions are, all that, from the little clues you drop throughout the chapter. That, to my mind, is one of the marks of a good writer: your reader gets the information they need to be able to visualise your world, without you spelling it out for them laboriously. So, detail where you need it, but not just because. The only thing I think you might add to this (and you may well do this in later chapters, which I have not yet read) is some more interior Roxas thought-process. I get why he gets in the car with Axel in the first place, but why then does he follow him up to his apartment? If I were Roxas, I'd have run like hell at that point, taking advantage of having been driven away from the crimescene in a total stranger's car. I'm looking forward to catching up on the rest of this, and I hope you manage to get whatever problems you're having with it sorted. Looks like it's worth the effort from what I've seen so far.
Kratos-puppy 2008-08-08 ch 1,	abuseLulz! I Love this story! Hurry and put up next chap please! I just read all the chaperts, and Riku seems kinda... insane to me. =P No offence Riku fans!! And keep writing! Whoo! ~does a happy dance with Axel and Roxas plushiezz~
666littlefreak666 2008-07-02 ch 12,	abuseits all so sad!!:( but i love it it has action romance horror everything to make ke keep reading it!! i love all you work!1(i read sugar & spice) please hurry with the next chapters!! and it the lawyer 'mansex' or mabey saix, it could even be xigbar!! thats how he and demmyx could meet.
Mallory 2008-06-20 ch 12, anon.	abuseHello there again. I just reviewed your other story a few hours ago. I loved this one even more. I just wanted you to know that right now it is 5am in the morning, and seeing as I am an excessively slow reader, I have been oogling your words for a good 5 or 6 hours. And I've adored every second of it. My stomach has been clenched through every chapter, which is quite the feat as it has been rumbling for the last 4 chapters. But I would rather starve myself than stop reading. I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm not sure if this all makes sense, it's been a while since sleep, but I just wanted to show my appreciation through this jumble of broken and unoriginal compliments. Lovelovelove, your newest fan.

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