Hmm, if you find your grammar and spelling to be troublesome you should get a beta. I am sure you could find someone willing to edit your chapters for such mistakes, afterall even the best writers need an editor. Were I not so busy, I would offer myself.

Aside from that, this is a generally enjoyable story. There is just enough sentence variation and use of literary devices and plot construction that the story can be appreciated though it still has quite a bit of room for improvement.
I rather like your plot, it is an interesting twist with lots of deliciously wicked plot potential.

A bit more careful construction of mood and use of setting would be appreciated and enhance your story greatly being that it is a horror. Your characterization is fair, but it seemed like you had a lot of loose ends they weren't tied up and many places where it seemed the story should have flowed a bit more into. The matter with Sasuke, Sakura's dreams, the very nature of the island... all of it holds a great potential for delightful suspense and little plot nuances that enhance the centeral idea and give a greater understanding to readers. Seeing more interactions between Sakura and her patients that hint more at their personalities or the pecularity of the situation would be nice. Thus while alright, the characterization needs a bit furthering.
Intrigue and greater suspense construction before the great unvieling of the plan would greatly aid your story due to its nature and I can just see how titilating it could be.

All in all good job! Written just well enough to capture and retain interest without overly confusing readers, becoming chaotically quick, or a banal. While I would have loved to see more from this, I liked the work and look forward to seeing the completion of the sequel. If you keep writing, I am sure one day you will be a marvelous writer; just never stop looking for growth, for we all can always improve more and more.

13 ghosts?? seriously? But this story's great!! as in mind-gripping, enticing, interesting, hooked-from-the-word great! Jiayou!! [aka break a leg]!!

p.s. i don't mind if this is a published book! XD can read all i want to and i don't need to turn on the com hehehe...ok jk!! O.o

p.p.s. it's normal for people to have grammer, spelling mistakes!

this prologue is literally exactly like the beginning of jurassic park. even the dialogue is similar.

i love it i know how you feel about the bad spelling i hane yhe same disability dont ley anyone put you done you rock

please tell me that gaara isent going to be a vampire, or im gonna compleatly give up on this story

i understood this chapter. and it was interesting, im gonna judge how you present the couple pairing of sakura and gaara when we come to that. proove me wrong on the pairing

i diddnt understand much of what was happening, and frankly i've always thoght sakura/gaara pairings were stupid. but yo wright really well, i was siucked in even though icouldent understand, and your wrighting flowed nicely. im gonna read on for that reason, and mabey your wrighting can convinve me otherwise about the couple pairing

OMG, im on the 4th chapter and DEIDARAS A GUY, WTF?!?!?!?! lol, its cool, nice twist to the story though. at first i thought it was ino o.O but i like your story and your choice of wordings, your a great author *gives cookie*

I just realized..

Sasuke completely disappeared during this entire thing.. XD

For some reason, FF won't lemme log in. x_X But I assure you, I am SilentUkeFuu.. ;D

I admit, I was a bit put off by the Robotic Werewolves, and I barely even read Naruto anymore..

But, even -I- knew that sounded like something Oro-Sama would do. Lulz.

Good for you, hun, for uploading this. Reminds me that I need to upload my own stuff.. [[If you know my stories, err.. I lost everything on my comp.. XD Whee.]]

AH KNEW EET! XD

Kiba!~

hi. just saying that i absolutly LOVE this story! and the whole thing with that sarah chick xp she needs help because she obviously can't tell what an awsome story is! what she said was ** **! and i read alot of other fan fics that have spelling errors in them to and it doesn't bother ME. so keep up the good work. i can't wait to read your other stories! x3

that was kool, great,
it seems like a movie or a book
if not you should make in to one but,
change the name a little

Sasori's the dad isn't he.

well i read all of this story and i have to say it was good and bad i mean a good story really just some parts wernt that great and yes you said it but ill say it too ur spelling SUCKS SO BAD well anyway good story and cant wait for more of your writing and also liked the gaaraxsakura part at the end a little short though