I liked this story. It spoke to my heart, and gave me a lesson in something I'd forgotten about. But now you can see the end for it.

I do like the angle with which you've taken the dynamic about Chuck and Neil and made it your own. The only thing I would have to say is that I don't think the rancor between Chuck and Neil was this deep, but you have your own view and its good to see.

Good details and nice job all around!