 astrum-faith 2009-02-02 . chapter 2Please continue this story. I've only just discovered it and I've read both the chapters and I really want to know what happens next! You've finished with Lex being told to convince Kara to be experimented on! How can you stop now? :( I wanna know what happens!
And now I'm going to actually review, as opposed to grizzling about you not updating often.
Seriously, you don't seem to have a problem writing a 16 year old girl - I'm a fifteen year old girl and, sure, this isn't like me, but then I'm not an average girl and I'm certainly not from Krypton! Really, you did a great job, and it's very realistic. Be proud of yourself! I don't know a lot of guys who could write a half-decent chapter with a female lead (actually, I don't think I know any), and this is really good.
I want to see Lex and Kara together again! She was so shy! I'm not asking for them to kiss or touch or anything, or even like each other as friends - I just enjoyed having them in the same scene. Is that weird? Oh, I don't care, I've already written it down, haven't I?
Lionel's being mean! Sorry, had to get that in, because it's true. :) I really want to see Lionel get punched unconscious at some point!
Of course, you already have a rough outline, and I don't expect you to change it just 'cause I asked. *puppy-dog eyes* IF you can get something like that in, please include it! Even if he trips! I don't mind what happens as long as SOMETHING happens to him! If possible. And I know it probably won't be possible. Oh well. I'll keep reading anyway! :)
Anyway, please update soon! |