Excellent chapter. Poor Pips I can't help but feel a little bad for him but my favorite part was the bit about Zak and Kia it was great and nice ending too btw full of suspense I can't wait to see what happens next and of course as always if you need me to draw anything for your chapters be sure to let me know :3

Nice to see an update with this story. Yay! A mention and more Batty. What a great day! Can't wait for more!

Another great chapter! ^_^ I hope to read more of it soon. :)

I'll admit the role-&-destiny thing was a little confusing to me...but it's a very well-thought-out idea nonetheless. The chapter was great, on the whole. Gonna read Chapter 8 & wait eagerly for another update. ^_^

Another great chapter! ^_^ Off to read the rest. :)

Oh, the plot continues to thicken...Can't wait to read what happens next! ^_^

Oh, Mr. Unger's a jerk! >:( Great chapter, though. :)

Oh, now, we're in the city... :D The plot thickens...

*gasp* And Zak, Brownie, & her grandpa return! ^_^ Yea!

Great chapter. :)

A very great chapter. :D You do a splendid job at combining elements of the movie & book with this story & your own original ideas. :) Way to go! ^_^ Well, off to read the rest of the story now! Keep up the good work!

Much love & admiration,
The Mouse Avenger

Nice Chapter.

I especially liked the part where Zak and Crysta were talking in Magi's tree. I cannot help but feel sorry for everyone at the moment and I can't wait to see what happens next.

I will get started on illustrating the picture you suggested for this chapter and post it up on Deviantart soon.

Keep up the good work, I can't wait to read more

Hmm... Well, I just started reading this and to be honest, you really need to use some punctuation to break up your sentences, otherwise it reads like a long drone, no matter how good the rest of the content is. However, I like where it's headed so far.

Yay! I was mentioned in the disclaimer! *does victory dance* Hee Hee

Wow- this chapter was heads above the last one. Awesome! Finally, I understand the whole destiny thing. I was wondering when you were going to explain that. Loved the bit with Batty there. (Not really sure why...)

Really good job- I didn't find any really annoying grammar problems to distract me this time. Yay! Seriously, good job with this chapter. You added some more detail and it was a good amount. Keep going- I'm liking this better and better all the time.

No problem and I don't mind if you color my drawing either :3 You did a nice job on this chapter and if you don't mind I am going to draw a picture for it. I also loved the part how Budgie and Zak know each other, well kind of, as I always thought they would've Lol. And I loved the whole Pips and Crysta are engaged thing, Hilarious! Keep up the good work

Interesting plot movement. It definitely is getting better. Keep going. Seems like everything is coming together. Awesome. Only one thing I would suggest- add more Batty. Right now it's kinda like the movie where he appears says something useful and then disappears. I would like it if he appeared more often. But if not oh well. Hey I'm not in charge of this story am I?

Great job. You're already improving alot with the writing. Keep going! I look forward to the next part!

Can you give me a link to the picture for this chapter? I can't find DDSRG's pictures anywhere.

P.S.- I checked out all your pictures and they're really cool!

Another good chapter. It's getting better. And I think I figured out what's bothering me about this story! "she worser then Crysta" There are sentences like that scattered throughout the chapters.

But there are less than in the first couple chapters. Great job!