I like all the short scenes - it gives a really disjointed feeling (not that the stories are disjointed, just that Steve's thoughts in them make it seem like he's jumping from memory to memory quickly). I like that he seems to get more and more detached as it goes on. It seems so easy and so simple to see him getting into drugs. Nice work.

Wow, I really loved this, Birdie.

You can just tell he's in Vietnam without you even saying it, and I liked the little detail about the lucky cigarette, lol.

I really liked how Ackley was talking about Kitty, it was so original the way he was talking about her cooking. I could picture the whole thing, too. Lol, and Steve was just like *shrugs* "She makes omelets."

I really liked the little details, it relates to Intervention and gives you a little background :)

Great job, again :D
--Alexa

Love how you wrote Steve. The dialouge, the foul language, it fits him perfectly. Real intersting how his bitterness and hatred towards the world intensifies since he is in Vietnam. Great story...despite how sad it is.

I enjoyed this one-hitter it's a nice follow up to as to why Steve started using drugs in the first place.I feel really bad for Steve durning this one -hitter. I hope to see more work from you soon.=)

You already know what I think. I still love this. :)

Peace,
Queen Jane

I like this sequence of vignettes, showing Steve's eventual turn to drug use while in Vietnam.