Hello Tohru Honda here. I loved this oneshot. Did you write that song cause it does't sound familiar. Thanks 4 writing.



Honda, Tohru

*sob*

so awesome! I don't know why, but I'm always touched by these stories! I loved it! XDD
Peace,
Nami

that was so sad and heart breaking. poor Tohru for dying and Kyo for well... for Tohru for dying! :'(

WHAT?? NO, that was to short. she couldn't die that fast! If she was in that bad of condition, she should've been asleep for a while longer as Kyo is taken outside to wait or something like that. And then hear the news. The idea was good, but hope this review wasn't to harsh.

no! *sobs*

beautiful... i loved it!

Argh, I'm sorry, I don't have any more ideas *bows* I apologize but I do love your work so please write more soon
~Myst

Some spelling errors but I do love the initial emotion sparked by the chapter. Try to look out for plural vs. single and perhaps state which cheek Yuki's caressing. I really love this couple and it's nice reading about them. I don't really think that Machi would be this...loud, it doesn't really seem like her, but I do like the idea of Akito. Try to work on characterization but I love the emotion in this chapter.
Fantastic work!
~Myst

Some spelling mistakes, I haven't written a songfic for about 4 years, it's nice to read them sometimes. Wow, Tohru got hit by a car, that's pretty sad. Wow, the fiction goes with the song but poor Tohru, I love how symbolic it is. Aww it's really really sweet. Aww, that's so sad and you're right he'd never forget her. You spelled Tohru's name wrong. The emotion needs some lead and there is spelling issues.
Nice work
~Myst

:)

poor machi! put more!

aww so sad! Poor Kyo!