Reviews for Well Enough Alone

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KathleenDee 2008-09-30 ch 12,	abuseHey hey another graet chapter! i really like your writing style Paines POV is spot on, you always keep me wanting more. Keep it up!
Yuna of Besaid 2008-09-30 ch 12,	abusePOOR Paine. SO confused about her life. Its okay, i'll swap with her...well I'll take Baralai anyway. Good chapter. can't wait to meet the parents.
TurboTwistedFire 2008-09-27 ch 12,	abuseMy birthday is coming up (October 2nd) so I'm gonna consider this as a early birthday present (Wishful thinking) Well, I was very excited to see that you updated. Once again, this is the highlight of my day (Well this, and the fact that my favorite racehorse won his race today!) But I have to be honest; I do not think this chapter was quite up to the standards that I have come to expect of you. After reading the previous chapter, which I thought was just freakin’ awesome! This one left me a bit... bored. There was nothing too exciting going on. But I suppose this chapter is supposed to be like a bridge in order to continue the story. Besides, not every chapter can be a smashing hit. I did notice a loophole though, or at least I think it's a loophole. I could be mistaken, but it's the part when Paine tells Baralai that she never read his mind. Was she intentionally lying to him? Because I was under the impression that she had read his thoughts before. I thought she did while she and Baralai were leaving Besaid. Maybe I just wasn't paying enough attention. Also, I noticed one (And just one) typo toward the end. "the impulse the chop off his ugly mop of a mohawk." I think you meant to say "to." Yeah, it is really hard to spot typos in your own work. That's why I find it best to have a beta reader around. Sometimes it takes a pair of fresh eyes that have yet to be exposed to the text to spot everything. You might want to think about getting one. It'll make it easier on you because then you won't have to read the same thing over and over again. I know that that can get quite daunting. At least for me it is. Anyway, I hope you update soon. Can't wait!
KathleenDee 2008-09-11 ch 11,	abuseLoved it, i trully do. Your muse had deff got some spunk! lol im really interested to see what happens next. My day was so boring and your update changed that! great job and update soon!
TurboTwistedFire 2008-09-11 ch 11,	abuseWow... I don't know what you're concerned about. I thought this chapter was awesome! Oh man, I don't mind your muse one bit. It just makes this story all the more creative. I can't see why anyone would resent this chapter for it. It was, and I say this with all seriousness, my favorite chapter in this story. It had everything; drama, love, little Paine/Baralai goodness, sadness. When I read the line Gwen said, "Why are you getting romantically involved with your first target?" I had tears in my eyes. Not full-on crying, mind you, but it did get to me emotionally. Poor Paine. I really hope that she will be able to decide who she cares for more; Baralai or The Invisible. As awesome as this chapter was, I feel I must show just how much I enjoyed it by pointing out four typos that I came across. "PLEASE leave a review when you're done writing!" Ok, ok, so it's only in the author's note, but hey, it's still an imperfection to a potentially perfect chapter. Anyway I think you meant to say "reading." You're the one doing the writing, not us. "and held it above you head during recess" I think there's supposed to be an "R" at the end of that "you". "I was surprised to hear him saw that he loved me." That "W" is supposed to be a "Y". "You just don't want to admit it do yourself" And here, I think you meant to say "to," not "do". Anyway... what else is there to say? I can't think of anything else other than please, update as soon as you can. This story is getting so good. ~TurboTwistedFire
Yuna of Besaid 2008-09-11 ch 11,	abuseNoo! Paine is so pesimistic...I mean I understand why. if I was her i'd be like 'NO!' How could you take soo long to update when I needed to know about Paine's past! I shun yoo...but not for long :)
KathleenDee 2008-08-28 ch 10,	abuseOMG...WHAT!? U can't end it here...update soon!Things seem to be getting very interesting. :)
Yuna of Besaid 2008-08-28 ch 10,	abuseAh. Didn't see that coming. OMG. Great chapter. Hell, I'm confused so Paine but be like 'WTF' right now.
TurboTwistedFire 2008-08-27 ch 10,	abuseMan I am so happy to see that you updated. It was such a perfect way to end my day. (It's 11:26 pm here). Such an awful cliffhanger though, but at least it was a very interesting chapter. So many good parts and I was so happy that the damn Invisible didn't come in to rain on Paine's parade for once. I was totally expecting them to drop in while Paine was lying peacefully on the bed with Baralai. Not that I don't like your idea of them. It's just kind of nice to break away from the drama for a short while. Anyway, great chapter. I am looking forward to the next one. ~TurboTwisedFire.
TurboTwistedFire 2008-08-19 ch 9,	abuseHi again! Great chapter and your update timing couldn't have been better. I've had a long week of arguments and no internet so this chapter was such a pleasant thing to come home to. I smiled to myself when I read that line of Baralai telling Paine that he was in the Crimson Squad for a reason. However, I don't mean to spoil the positive feedback, but I did find a typo that I thought I should bring to your attention. "made shier after shiver shoot down my spine." You see? You forgot a "V" in what looks like it’s suppose to say "shiver." Sorry, I like it when readers point out typos to me, so think of this as my special way of saying, "I like this story," cause if I didn't I wouldn't bother to point this out to you. =D Looking forward to another update, ~TurboTwistedFire
KathleenDee 2008-08-18 ch 9,	abuseOoh! Paralai smut! I love it! ... um...yea this chapter was super sweet and kinda funny. I like reading things in Paines POV, GREAT JOB i really can't wait to read what happens next!
Yuna of Besaid 2008-08-18 ch 9,	abuse( clears steam that formed on laptop screen) that was a very steamy ending lol. Oh please don't let this fic end with tragedy.Kill Shelinda or some other character that's annoying. You really have got both character's perfect! I don't want the Paralai-ness to end...ever. I really want to say something constructive but that chapter was just great so I cant :( Keep it up and please don't kill Baralai. Not that I can change your mind, its your fanfic after all (don't kill, don't kill, don't kill)
TurboTwistedFire 2008-08-07 ch 8,	abuseWell I got to say that I really like this story so far. It's so entertaining. Just a few days ago I was more of a Gippal fan but after reading this fic and another fic about Baralai he's really starting to grow on me. He's just so sweet and well-mannered. The story is very well-written and I am enjoying it a lot. My only beef (Cause I just got to) is you kind of write out Baralai to be a bit of a wimp. What I mean by that is, twice now Paine has had to fight on her own while Baralai does nothing but runs off and gets help. I mean, give the man some credit; he was one of only four to make it through the Crimson Squad for crying out loud. He's got to have more tricks up his sleeve than just running off to sound the alarm.
Yuna of Besaid 2008-08-03 ch 8,	abuseThis chapter was really good. Keep it up. I don't want Paine to get caught...or kill Baralai thats just wrong! Lol. Good story!
KathleenDee 2008-08-02 ch 8,	abuseo great chapter. I wanna know what happens next so please update soon!

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