You cannot leave it here...you have her voice down perfectly. And the phone thing...man I have lived that phone thing...have you lived that phone thing? You must have, because you nailed it.

You also nailed this..

So I skip class. I run down the halls with Rayann, and I watch her hair fly out behind her. Her crazy hair. Her sad eyes. I love that girl. She’s my white rabbit.

and this...

I thought of calling Jordan, just dialing the numbers and waiting to hear his voice inside my ear, inside my head. The thought of doing that, of just like calling him up made me dizzy. I couldn’t do it. What if he said, “who are you?” He might say that. He just might annihilate me with three words.

and this...

I glared at him and he narrowed his eyes at me. Such was my life. I wanted Jordan Catalano but I always ended up with Brian Krakow.


Come back soon please.

In love with this story
please write more soon.

aw, loved this so much! so very good...and real!
i hope THIS time it gets the praise it's worth!
there are way to few reviews to this little masterpiece! i feel sorry for who's missing it..hee
xo

This Angela reminds me so much of myself when I was at that stage.
Damn hormones. I think Angela will be in a rude awakening. Life just sucks at that age. Good job Paperplane you capture teenage angst perfectly. And I will definitely be in for the ride.

Stupid phone calls. They take so much thought and energy!
Iused to have the same fear of phoning someone that she does now. It's really an annoying fear.
Loved this chapter! I completely understand what she means about her brain just not bieng able to think of anything else. You've got Angela perfect here. :)

I love this chapter but in particular I think this is brilliant -

"So sick of myself. I could never, like, get away from myself. Was I the only one who felt this way? I grew weary of having to be around myself 24 hours a day and think my thoughts, fear my fears. I was tired of the way Jordan Catalano had crawled into my viscera and I couldn’t get him out. I wanted a break from myself for just five minutes."

Amazing work, Please keep it up.

another good chapter

Wow, you've got Angela's mind down perfectly! All the smilies and random big words in an already difficult sentence! I love it!
Please please please keep it up! I'll be waiting for an update!

Ugh, this is so good, and I want to read more, even if it doesn't go any further, even if it's just to hear Angela say things like, "He just might annihilate me with three words." Beautiful. Keep it up.

another good chapter

I am in love with your writing style, it is so captivating. I was swept away into Angela's bittersweet little world so fast. Your attention to detail is really good. Please keep writing. I love that this is classic Jordan/Angela, not overly fantasized/romantic, not that I don't love that sometimes too.

good start to the story, cant wait for more

He DID have a ring.

Are you gonna write more!? I think you should write more. I truly enjoyed that! :D