awsome story about what could have happened keep up the good work

Ok, I got up to chapter 13 on this story and I will admit that you have an interesting concept but...there isn't any real conflict- Kirk dies and is immediatly brought back (making him young agian was kind of retarded), you never go into the failure bit of the Genisis project...and it moves to fast. You thrust the characters immediatly into an action packed moment, grow bored and throw them into another.

I like the idea you have of Kirk dieing instead of Spock in TWOK, but...this could be improved.

I will say this though- You have great grammar skills, a rarity on this site.

An excellent "What If" it had been Kirk instead of Spock. I loved the way you set things to rights after it all went wrong. It was a testament to Kirk's character that he knew that for the Earth to survive, Spock had to die.

Excellent!

Kudos'nuff Said

Wow ... just wow. I love this story and the ending is perfect. The first chapter was very moving and unlike other authors you have stayed true to the series with no slash! You have also stayed true to the characters , Krik , Spock and Bones friendship is beautifully written. Well done.

I just found this by chance today and roared through it all during my lunch hour at work. Good stuff! I especially like the way you used Diane Duane's Rihannsu in the story; I far prefer her Romulans to the ones in canon. They're so much more alive in Duane's stories, more exotic and complex, and I simply *love* her intricate Rihanha names. You did a really good job!)

WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!*ahem* Sorry. But its sooooo sad!*sniff
v. v. v. good though. Most brilliant!

Great story! It was interesting, and fun to read- I loved it.

That was so good! I really liked how you kept pulling me in. Fussing with time is something that should only be done with extreme consideration and your story showed that. Yay!

Hey keep up the great writing. I really want to know what happens next. This is one of the best Star Trek I have come across in a lonnnng time at this site. I can't wait for the next part. Hope it come out soon. You really got me hooked on wandering what is going to happen next.

Very good example of what the Prime Directive of the Federation based on Vulcan's Pacisifism can cause. The total defeat of the Federation...

Just t'let you know _someone's_ reading this... Hey, I've been there...;

I love this story. Kirk has always been my fav Star Trek character. Please continue

the storyline.

This is an overwhelmingly, wonderful, breathtaking, tremendous, remarkable, amazing, awe-inspiring, and astounding story! Keep up the great work!

Bai!

Splendid story. I really want more, so you have to write more in the next few weeks.

Brilliant plot! I love it!