I quite liked it... Truly, I did.

So sweet!

Very Sweet!

I liked this, overall very good idea. My suggestions are that you have a bit more if a backstory, since in allot of these they're not together yet. Maybe by adding phrases like "his Merry/Pippin" and emphasizing their love towards each other ( fan girls, as I'm sure you know, eat that up like candy ;D) and adding more description to things like their environment, what just happened/what they're about to do, and how they appear to each other. In other words, you can make them longer by describing the physical things. But don't forget to leave out the feelings; those are just as or sometimes even more important than the surroundings.

Overall, good track you're on. The key thing to writing one shots or slashes is to make them a bit longer by adding detail. Hope to see more from you!

Mimzy

KUDOS TO YOU.

the cuteness killed me

Nice story, but I got really thrown off in the 3rd to last paragraph, which starts with 'Together,' where you refer to Merry as "her."

Could you fix that?

Heh heh, that is a very crafty tactic at the bottom

It was very well written, it all seemed so real and beautiful. Nice work!

... "Merry's arms closing around HER"?

I believe we've either got a freudian slip or a generic mess up hereabouts. _

Particularly jarring 'cause it's, like, y'know, one of the closing, emotionally-gleeful sentences of the fic. You focus on it. And it's... off.

Good fic, though, otherwise. Lots of your fic is good, but I'll probably never remember to review any of it, so I'll just throw this out there - this is good, and all of your Merlin fic is good as yet, and you've got a good taste in pairings and a good sense of humor, so I'll probably read a lot more of your stuff even though I'll probably never again review. It's not you, it's me, srsly.

(BTW - TOS fic? Merlin? Gravitation? Merry/Pippin? RENT? Lassie/Shawn? WTF are you, my pseudo-OTP-clone? All the best ones, too. These are the OTPs I dropped because I read all the fic of 'em that was on FFnet at the time... 3 years ago. Damn. You just got me started again. _)

aww, i love Merry/Pippin slash, and i especially love Pip's pov. . a very lovely piece of fluff, thank you!

so much cuteness :D this made me all happy inside haha.

-lets out a loud and long 'Aw' that annoys the hell outta the two- 3

aww. its cute.

*aw* i love it.

"...Merry’s arms enclosing around her."

OMG. D: Pip's a GIRL? I had no idea. I might've thought Merry was a girl, just on account of his nickname... but Pippin? Truly, truly a shock. :D