I've read so many generic DB fanfictions, it's nice to see a new spin on things. Great job!

This is my favourite DB story! And I like the little tie-in with your other story about that tiara...
It doesn't look like the two stories will merge together, but it would have been so nice to have mages and assassins together

Nice story. But what I find weird is the fact about Lucien. He is her bloody father! WTF! Yeah, and he sounds so NICE in your story. Isn't he normally creepy and scary and mean? Oh well, VERY nice story. I really loved it so far.

I loved the entire dungeon that you based this chapter on. Excellent retelling. I really love the character, and you're absolutely spot-on with her near-insanity. I love a good anti-hero(ine).

This is a good story so far, just make longer chapters and you'll be perfect!

XD and don't worry, my backspace button is on the edge of busting too :P

Still fantastic, enjoying every chapter. Keep going!

Very nicely written. A few complaints: Arissa's compassion towards Lucien and Vicente seems a bit out of place, as she needs to have more of an emotionless detachment, even though she desperately desires a father figure. Perhaps this could be written to be an internal conflict for her.

Ever since I went through the Dark Brotherhood quest line about 8 times, I have been desiring more, and your story does a great job filling that void.

Please keep the updates coming on this story. :)

real good so far

This is nice. It depicts a softer side of Lucien and I like how the you aren't following the Quest line. After all, there isn't reason to but it is a testament to your imagination. Can't wait to see what happens next. Will she bump into the boy who gave her the tiara sometime? Update soon!

Great story, with a believable main character and interactions that are in keeping with the blood-thirsty Brotherhood we all know and love!
Arissa is a perfectly balanced professional assassin without being invincible, which too many stories seem to glance over, and her thought processes are sinister, but again without being overwhelmingly *evil*.
Basically, a fantastic story; keep it up!

Excellent! Just excellent! Good solid plot with a likeable and believeable main character, nice and balanced. The Dialouge between Lucien and Arissa was very well done and the words seemed to flow together properly. It's a total crime you haven't got more reviews >__< Can't wait for the next chapter

Anyways, keep up the great work and I will be deffinatly adding this to my favs!
Fire Kunai

Another freaking awesome chapter. I wish I could write as well as you do. It never ceases to amaze me how well you capture your characters in their thoughts and dialog.

I hope you find the time to sort your storylines out!

really good and arissa very bloodthirsty nicely written

I love the start to this story. It's only getting better with this chapter. Keep it up, I love a good DB story!

I don't see why you're not happy with this chapter -- it's amazing! As well as the first one. I'm watching this story. ^^