 A-Sha Pinkiex 2009-11-16 . chapter 8:o You must continue soon, I just love having Mia and Andrew together. They make the cutest couple. besides, Andrew ia way hawter than Nicholas. Bleh. |
 A-Sha Pinkiex 2009-11-16 . chapter 5Oh I love this new side of Andrew. A tinge of possessiveness, I see. Cute :) |
 Chaos Dragon 2009-10-29 . chapter 8this is a great deal of fun. as much as i enjoy the mia/nicholas bits of the movie, i always did think it was just terrible the way he was all loathesome. this is a nice take on it. please finish soon!
~cd |
 SpaceHead3 2009-07-24 . chapter 8Great story! Keep those punches rolling and update soon please! |
 Elfvamp1-13-97 2009-07-02 . chapter 8I love it update Soon |
 Flowertropic 2009-06-30 . chapter 8 This story is so good. I love Andrew/Mia stories. Please finish it soon! |
 BlueHour95 2009-06-29 . chapter 8Yay, so glad that you updated this story.
Things are coming along at a rapid pace. Nice movie continuity with the mention of Nicholas tossing pebbles at Mia's window while she was out with Andrew. I am glad that you had Andrew considering the consequences of punching out Nicholas, as satisfying as he may have found it. a "You go, girl" would have seemed too out of character
One question: Is Nicholas being sincere in your fanfiction or is he simply schmoozing? I can't quite tell whether he means it and is just oblivious and self-centered or if he's being manipulative. If it's the second, then I actually feel a little sorry for the big galoot. I can't blame Mia for being angry, although wouldn't it bother Andrew that Nicholas managed to punch her button so easily?
A couple of minor nitpicks: you have a few minor spelling errors. Mia's fist should "clench up" not "clinch". And the Disney references are cute, but since we've already had characters mentioning it, you should probably cut it back so it doesn't become overkill. Have Lily crack a joke about the G-rated romance - it gets the point across without being an obvious in-joke
I did like the conversation with Lily. As usual, Lily was downright pugnacious, which fits in with her character. You also did a nice job with Lily's voice - "prince charming consort" was sweet
Looking forward to the next chapter! |
 Frankie 2009-06-29 . chapter 8 Very funny chapter and so true to life! You're awesome with making your characters come alive-- I can actually see everything as it's happening. The chemistry between the two of them is smokin'.
so glad you updated!
--Frankie C. |
 Aswen 2009-06-28 . chapter 8I love this so much! Nicholas will be black and blue if he doesn't learn to shut his mouth... Update soon please! |
 MusicalMaryann 2009-06-28 . chapter 8Yay! Looking forward to next chapter. There isn't enough AndrewxMia fanfic about! :) |
 Kristi-Julie 2009-06-28 . chapter 8*Big grin* Gosh, I can't wait for the new chapter!! <3
I'm so glad that Mia hit Nicolas straight in the jaw!! Well done! |
 Fire Dolphin 2009-06-28 . chapter 8aw, its so CUTE! love the fluff. i cant wait to read the next chapter and see what else happens, hope there is no more trouble for mia! |
 frankiebaby 2009-06-16 . chapter 7I hope you finish this soon; it's wonderful!
--Frankie |
 violet 2009-06-14 . chapter 7 I love this story and hope that you can continue it, I love the lightness that you incorprate into the story and I wish to see more teasing and bantering. Good work |
 Lavender 2009-06-13 . chapter 7 Hurry up and update. |