For a one-shot, it's pretty good.

This was really well written. I don't usually read one-shots because they usually end up with such little potential that I get bored, but this was a really good one.
Kanbai!

i very much liked your fic.

Well. I'm not really into this pairing, but since I finally decided to read a fic of yours:
My compliments. You say this was your first, right? Well, it has less detail than your later ones, but it really is good. My favorite part: you keep the characters fairly IC. Really, I can't even poke at any obvious style mistakes or anything. Shweet.

Oh yeah:
"A beansprout is a beansprout, maximum synchronization or not."
Best. Line. Ever. xD

That's so cute, but so sad!
hurray for yaoi

Very nice story. I might want to check the squals.

*Thumbs up* I like! The pairing, the reactions of the others, Bookman's warnings, the style and flow of the writing, really good!

Are you continuing this? It feels...unfinished...
Briliant writing and dialogue! (i love the lav/allen pairing)
As a LxA writer, do you know any good sites to read it? I can only seem to find ONE!

Wow I really love this fanfic! I can't find many decent, non-hentai fanfics of this couple but it is my favorite couple! I love you! ^_^

loved it!! please update soon ^^ i love laviallen so much and your fic is great so far :D

I really like this. You made the relationship between Allen and Lavi seem realistic and the other chracters reactions too. I hope you decide to continue this in the future >.

aww it's really cute

WAY TO GO KROY! jeez lavi, go easy on the kid

All I have to say is: Wow! What a great story you have going here! It's wonderfully detailed and your grammar is fantastic (that's a big one for me: I hate people who can't put sentences together correctly or don't take the time to make sure their spelling is right)! Your characterization of everyone is perfect, especially our main two boys. I have to say that you write Krory extremely well too (then again, there isn't much of him in the way of fanfiction unless he's the one who whines a lot). Also, you wrote the Bookman (I love that old man, I'm sorry, I just can't help it) great, and I applaud you for it. The plot has me very interested and I hope to definitely see more from this story in the future!