wow. what an unhappy marriage that guy must have lived through.

also, did they kill themselves? or did he kill himself after she died?

and another thing "before they fell asleep that night, these were the words they exchanged". not saying im an expert in writing or anything, in fact far from it, but they sentence feels like something an english teacher/professor would correct for some reason. telling when you should be showing? i think that is it.

aw poor Shika!! This reminds me of the film "the notebook".. the story was a little like this XD

wow this is REALLY good! I liked it alot!

wow...You have done well...I'm ashamed that you are just my co authour and not a person who I can see at my school

Wow, again? Have you learnt or heard of the art of quoting? Do that, not a duplicate. We don't need none of that here. Try again... go on!

im sad your one shot was shocking if you coudl put more effect and details...
but i liked it a lot bye
prays for more reviews

I really liked it. It was fitting that at teh very end she was able to finally be with him. And just so you know you deserve far more than 5 percent of teh credit.