Excellent story! I am looking forward to you continuing. Good grammar, good flow. Occasional misspellings, but nothing that disrupted the flow. AND I like that your writing has lots of "meat" to it - you take the time to descibe things, and get into the character's minds. There are too many works out there that are very sparse and just describe the action; yours is a welcome exception to the majority.

Keep up the good stuff!

*grins* OHBB, huh? It's always good to see a high-quality fic, especially since it came from one of the many talented authors there. Your story has a good, steady flow to it, coupled with suspence in just the right places. M, and some symbolism, too... :)

Keep up the good work, and I look forward to the next chapter!