I think you should do some more with this!


~Tiffany

WOW. That was really amazing! Reall well written as well! Your english is great you shouldnt worry :)

I really liked the end bit with the fire that was cool lol. And i liked submissive edward and dominant jacob as well.

Very nice :P LOL

Wow.
I absoloutely love Jacob/Edward.
And this was BRILLIANT.
In my mind, despite Jacob being the one who's taller and probably stronger, I imagined him as the submissive. No idea why.
However, I like him as the dominator in this fic; the way he overpowered Edward was just... ** inducing haha :D.
You're english is really good; it doesn't suck (:

This was aweosme! Loved it!

write more!

That was really good

very awsome i hope u keep writing more like this but u should have like a 3some with bella in there or alice or rose...maybe leah clearwater...anyway keep right very very good!!

Megan-Cullen123

Interesting... I'd like to see this continue. Maybe time has passed a little and edward is remembering his time with jacob. He remembers how he felt almost human and can't help but secretly crave that feeling again.

Don't know, maybe you could go somewhere with that. Can't wait to read more!!~

ek! that was awesome!

FANTASTIC.
I enjoyed every moment! n.n Good job!!

Amazing! So detailed and everything! So what if you had a few grammar errors?

Please keep writing!!

wow hot steamy lemony oh so good

Crow

I noticed you had a few problems with switching between past tense and using present tense words sometimes. Don't worry- everybody makes those mistakes. Other than that, beautiful. Magnificent. One of the best things I've read in a while. Keep up the good work.

I love it!

Abbz

Awe! That was good!
I LOVED it!

:3
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