 CappuccettoRosso 2008-03-17 . chapter 6LMAO. From butt probes to Trowa being the resident UFO 'expert', it was too much. *cackles* Though I have to wonder, what was the revenge for... |
 Kaeru Shisho 2008-03-07 . chapter 6What a great ending. I love the gloating Duo with his evil followers. Wonderful image. the final lines were so perfect. These two guys have been seriously had, their fears laid naked, and then Chang just comes unglued!
"I told you it was a cult," Wufei spouted in righteous anger as the doors slid closed, spitting out feathers with each word. "Why does no one listen to me? None of you ever listen to me, I swear. It's like a continuing bet to see just how many times the lot of you can manage to not listen to-"
"Shut up, Chang," Heero told him with a sigh, dropping his head on the table with a clang and sending up a small cloud of feathers.
Terrific short story!
--KS |
 Wolfje 2008-03-05 . chapter 6Hahaha, that was just great! Poor, poor Heero and Wufei *grins evilly* But oh, so brilliant... ^_^ I especially loved the Trowa the UFO expert part and the Duo stuck in a tree part. So funny, Hehe. I can so imagine Trowa keeping a straight face (duh) wile making that storie up. Really, I wish I had the tools - my friends would hate me forever (but thats why there fanfiction, neh).
I loved the thing with Trowa's hair, btw -> He was glad for the partial protection of his hair should Wufei happen to be incensed enough to produce projectile globs of spittle. "Could you please define what LGM stands for?" Heero asked, looking puzzled. "Little green men," Trowa explained. "I see. And SLB?" "Space love boat." |
 snowdragonct 2008-03-05 . chapter 6Aw, tarred and feathered! (In a manner of speaking.) Heh, heh. Definitely the best of all practical jokes! And on the two G-boys with the least sense of humor. Ya gotta love it. Or Duo. Yeah, ya definitely gotta love Duo...and his devilish cult following. I'm with Tro and Quat in wanting to be part of Maxwell's devilry! |
 Kirihana 2008-03-05 . chapter 6Major lulz. That's all I have to say. |
 Kaeru Shisho 2008-03-04 . chapter 5I was right there huffing and puffing with Duo up that tree. Poor baby no fish dinner! At lest he got the satisfaction of this:"...It was nice to see Heero so close to reacting like a normal person, Duo thought."
Oh, please, let this play out to Duo's benefit. I don't even need to know what brought it on, but if Trowa, Quatre, and Duo all agree to go to this much trouble, it had to be something.
--KS |
 Kaeru Shisho 2008-03-04 . chapter 4Well, now we know Duo is up to something grand, since he mised the jeep ride up the mountain. I love this. i love Quatre and i love this snippy Wufei:
"Do you not like the division of labor? I'd be more than happy to trade partners with you-"
"No!" Wufei spat, cutting him short with a knife-chop of his hand. "It will stay the way I have said until such time as I say otherwise. Are we clear?"
EP! Clear as a bell.
Then comes the best line:"We should have a sing-a-long! You know, to pass the time since it's such a long drive up there."
Almost as one, all three of his companions quickly responded with a resounding, "No."
Wufei's sniper shots and Heero's grunts are just too, too, funny.
--KS |
 Kaeru Shisho 2008-03-04 . chapter 3Since I was doing this prior to reading your story, I must laugh aloud: "Trowa looked away from his own monitor, frowning at his most recent failed attempt to clear a field of minesweeper on the advanced level. "
This, this was so funny i nearly died: "The gears of Heero's brain seemed to be grinding their way through a particularly large chunk of rust, his face twisting in ways that Trowa had not seen on him before. Finally, he pieced together enough of his thoughts to ask something that was likely not as difficult to process. "Is this why you spend so much time watching the skies when we go on wilderness missions?"
"You mean camping?"
Heero paused for a brief moment. "Yes."
Oh, I might as well cut and paste the whole d a m n thing here. It is all so well done.
--KS |
 Kaeru Shisho 2008-03-04 . chapter 2This follow up to that great line ( "Heero, do I look like the kind of guy that enjoys having his butt probed?" ) is special: "...here was something joyously sinister about the look on his face." That describes Duo's expression exactly. But then you follow that with another line that is hysterical: "...Combined with the inherent danger involved in answering the question, it was enough to give Heero pause. Again." I nearly feel sorry for the suffering Heero. But not really. For some reason I get the feeling he's got this coming to him, and more.
And this endless paper shuffling going on...so funny! "..."Oh wow, this is kind of disorganized and stuff," Duo noted suddenly, causing Heero to wonder if his mind were somehow being read – the result of an encounter with an alien probe, maybe?"
Loving this
--KS |
 Kaeru Shisho 2008-03-04 . chapter 1Okay, I'm hooked. I cried at this sequence, and I know you're just starting to work up to further hilarity:
"I'm vaguely concerned about its contents and what they might be ordering me to do."
"Only vaguely?"
"All right, deeply."
You have nailed Duo and Heero, but Wufei... he is priceless.
--KS |
 snowdragonct 2008-03-04 . chapter 5Aw, I never saw it coming! You are SO clever! I'm going to dash off and tell my friend Kaeru Shisho to read this. It's TOO hilarious. We'll spread the word. Can't wait to see the grand finale of the set-up. I have ONE request...let Duo WIN. Let him succeed (along with his two partners in crime) and let him glory in the victory over the perfect soldier and the justice fiend! He is SO cool. |
 snowdragonct 2008-03-03 . chapter 2Oh. My. God.
I have GOT to go tell everyone to read this! It's HILARIOUS! I've bypassed it several times, and finally decided to just take a peek at the first chapter to try it on for size. TOO FUNNY! You need more reviews! You need readers! This must be shared. (Granted, my opinion could change depending on how the subsequent chapters go...but I had to pause at the end of chapter two to vent my hilarity!)
This is seriously silly and totally enjoyable, so far. |
 Kirihana 2008-03-03 . chapter 3Yeah, so I laughed my ** off in my head. Which is totally possible and necessary, since I oh-so-foolishly read fanfiction in the library. Anyway, highly amusing, particularly the "Heero, do I look like the kind of guy that enjoys having his butt probed?" line... but that might just be the rabid fangirl in me. Keep up the great work! |
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