Whoa, a vengeful Hibari is a scary Hibari indeed. And counting on Mukuro, his sworn enemy? He must be really, really pissed off to do that.

Um, you aren't very consistent with your tenses, just a little. Assuming that you planned to end in the present tense, you switched to the past tense after...three paragraphs, I think.

Other than that, nice fic =D Keep writing!

such determination...then again...I can picture him actually doing that...haha:)

wowso they'd work together?
awesome!

This was very interesting. I can see Hibari feeling like this angry and disappointed. I think you nailed Hibari's feelings very well.

Pretty nice :)

Pretty good, but I saw a minor typo.

"...seemed to havve realized that the baby had been there /to/."

I-I just read this on LJ.

Very nice insight! You portrayed Hibari really well. I thought that adding Mukuro in near the end didn't work out that well, though. It was a bit random since there wasn't any foreshadowing of Mukuro beforehand...

Overall, it was a very nice Hibari-centric fic. ^^;

That was neat :D I think you should write more of Reborn :D
Great job with this one though :D