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| samiseriouslyam 2008-03-02 ch 1,  | abuseA couple nitpicks: In the second paragraph, are you talking about Light Yagami or light in general? Light energy doesn't solve cases or earn adoration, and Light Yagami is not really a 'thing'. Also, in the third paragraph you say 'he', then in the last you clarify it was L. Just switch the pronoun and the name, and it'll be fine. But ignoring those two nitpicks, the story was pretty good. :) You made a good choice on the summary as well. 'death is one mystery everyone must and will solve.' Very nice. |
| indigo's ocean 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseI very nearly cried. I really did. Funny, because even L's death in the manga didn't actually make me cry. I think I'll read it again. Then I'll cry. -love- ~indigo |
| MiaoShou 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseThat's amazing! You've said such a lot in such a small space - it's sweet and very, very sad. Thank you :) |
| Static Lull 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseYou've done something amazing with only a handful of words. |
| Courtnylovesramen 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abusei like this a lot! it's so short but that's part of why it's so good - the few scentences are very powerfull. i like it!! |
| Ikumak 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuse(I'm LoathedWolfSpirit, changed my user name) Awe even at the amount of words, it's absolutely sweet. Weather it be seen with a slasher's eyes or not. I love the play of words. It sounds like the conclusion of a multi-chapter story and would have been a great ending for the manga- if it had a narrirator. Wonderful stuff. |