Reviews for A demons heart

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leetdragon7 2008-09-26 ch 17,	abuseomfg this fic is so good plzplzplzplzplzplzplzplzplzplzplzplzplzplzplpzlplzpzlplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplplpz hury and update athor-sama
The Prince ofInfinite Darkn... 2008-09-26 ch 17,	abuseThis is the first FMA crossover fic that i liked so far. A question I would like to ask is what are Naruto's weaknesses specifically as I am not exactly sure what they are
kyosuke-date-the soultaker- 2008-09-25 ch 6,	abuse(sniffles and cries) p-p-poor naruto!!
ApatheticGhost 2008-09-20 ch 5,	abuseBest FMA X Naruto fanfiction I have seen yet. Very nice story.
Burning DragonSword 2008-09-13 ch 17,	abuseYou've got a pretty interesting story so far. Good luck with the rest of it.
Blizzardfang 2008-09-06 ch 17,	abusenice chap
FumetsuKaji 2008-09-05 ch 17,	abuseYay! They are united again! I cant wait to see what happens. I cant wait to see more interaction between the brothers and Zamiel/Naruto. I still would LOVE to see Naruto use jutsu in front of people and have them be shocked and amazed. I really hope that because of Fate that Naruto will become an expert at med-jutsu soon. Have I mentioned how happy we are that you updated? 'We love this story, please update again soon!'
Dark Reborn 2008-09-04 ch 17,	abuseI wonder...the orb of souls that Truth gave Zamiel, would it work as a Philosopher's Stone replacement? Technically, they btoh have the same ingredients. Human Souls. And Manson. Will he tell Ed and Al that Zamiel is really Naruto? And Truth, she really like Naruto alot, doesn't she. The little child she has, he called Naruto Daddy, but Naruto might've been to confused to notice that. Naruto's demon, will it forever be sated by the souls Truth gave Naruto, or will eventually grow tired of the replacement and started lusting after Ed and Al's blood again. And the demon, is it like a split personality, half of Naruto's complete and total soul, or a completly different being, or mind? Sorry if I'm asking too much. I can't wait until the next chapter! ^_^
BlueRyuu 2008-09-04 ch 17,	abusedid the grammar and spelling get worse? O-o oh well, i still love the story. if its legible, i give it credit! >:O please update as soon as you can~ ^^ yay Naruto! you came back! ~.~ :D:D
Cherri202 2008-08-10 ch 13,	abuseSo far I have to say that storyline-wise this is one of the best FMAxNaruto stories I have read. The worlds flow, the characters are well portrayed. The main issue that you have with this story is spelling and grammar. 1. Names are always capitalised. NO EXCEPTION. So instead of you sometimes using 'ed', use 'Ed'. Lust is another one you often miss. 2. I can see that you are using spellcheck, but you might want to check what you are changing words into, some are similar but not the right words to use. Most commonly you have "Are" instead of 'our'. Re-reading chapters or getting a Beta should help with this. You should be able to pick up most of these simply by checking the chapter before you post it. 3. If dialogue is the start of a sentence, it is still capitalised, don't forget also to end dialogue with full stops if it is the end of the sentence/paragraph. Let me try a sentence for you as an example; “oh and why are you so auctions to get the stone, you want to beet the laws of equivalence just as I do and bring your mommy back” Should be (I think); “Oh? And why are you so anxious to get the stone? You want to beat the laws of equivalence just as I do and bring your mommy back.” 'Anxious' and 'beat' were corrected as different words entirely from what you intended. Dialogue needs a capital and the end of the dialogue is also the end of a sentence so it needs a full stop. The '?' marks separate the questions from the talking. Hope I could help some, this story really has a wonderful storyline and hopefully I've helped a bit the the grammar issues. Maybe you should recheck some of your earlier chapters and fix them too? Sorry if I bored you too much, hope you don't mind constructive critisism ^.^ Good luck!
shippudenfan890 2008-08-02 ch 16,	abuseplease update soon, please please please
blackmirage27 2008-07-30 ch 1,	abuseGreat story, keep up the
ScreenSurfer 2008-07-30 ch 2,	abuseyou have a good thing going, but spelling errors gallore. Garra? You meant gaara. Encase? Incase? Pray? Prey?
Alarose 2008-07-28 ch 16,	abusecool story, not many great FMA/Naruto crossovers out there. You did a good job, update soon!
FireShadow674 2008-07-26 ch 16,	abuseThis story keeps getting better and better, I hope that you update soon.

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