I seen the start of this story on a topic on pokeschool.com, so I wanted to see what it looked like here. Looks pretty good, I hope you will return to typing the story.

hmmm... very good beginning so far. Save for the few grammaratical errors I have nothing but praise, however, that's never been my strong point, so I'll leave it at you having my respect for you as an author. Just a few words of friendly advice. 1) Be wary of making your main character into superhuman thing, not that you've done this yet, because you haven't, but I'm just cautioning you ahead of time. This is a very tempting thing to do, especially in a self insert fic (which I'm assuming this). Not only would such a thing be unrealistic, but it would also go against the very basis of Eva. 2) Try to keep characters in character. Unless there is a good reason for it, Gendo probably wouldn't have written such a nice letter to Josh. Of course, there isn't enough of the story up yet for me to tell if Gendo did have a reason, so this comment may be baseless. Anyways, I'll stop preaching now, and leave you by saying that I really can't wait to see where you go with this story. -FuryS Forge/Lactamaeon.