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| Lolchen 2008-07-17 ch 1,  | abuseGreat prequel, I look forward to reading the sequel! Oh, this is so cruel, the title is just perfect! Who would've thought that the destined mates would become siblings? Just cruel, really... Oh, and I found some typos, here: “Youko told the miko. he stood and pulled a seed from his hair” (2nd part, end) “Kagome snapped., poking Youko in the chest.” (3rd part) “Hhe had no energy left.” (4th part, beginning) “"I had no energy to run or fight. Thank you, Youko, Thank you." the fox rumbled a purr even as it fur was soaked by her tears.” (4th part, middle) Typos are always so hard to find in your own fics, ne? But you did great with this part of the story, though I think the jumps in feelings for each other between the first three sections is a bit too... much. Maybe you should have mentioned meetings in between, or reduced the 'love' feeling to something more on the ligns of 'lust'. Anyway, I love the following parts and all in all it's well done. mfG Lolchen |
| oreoxlove4ever 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abuseso now their twins?...interesting... great story though =) |
| g2fan 2008-03-07 ch 1, | abuseGreat story. Wendy |
| IchikoKitsuneKoumori 2008-03-07 ch 1, | abuseO_O Reikai had no right! |
| WhiteDemoness11 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuse*sighs* We did ask. You gave. And I so wish there was a happy ending. Incest or not I LOVE this twist. I hope you'll consider someday expanding this in a happy way perhaps, or just more Kag/Kur. I love the way you did this, absolutely beautiful even as a stand alone. ^_^ I'm gonna go cry an stuff now. |
| Elvira Duchess Of The Night 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abusethat was great and so sad until they met again in her era. to bad that you most likely will not make another to thing one huh |
| Beta 2008-03-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseHow can you be a Beta if you can't even spell grammar and excel right? You even claim you excel in grammar yet you misspell it with "grammer". You also spelled "threesomes" wrong. |
| Sess 2008-03-03 ch 1, anon. | abusePrequel is spelled with two E's, no A. Sequel as well. |
| KougaSesshomaruAnime 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseAw... Love IT!! |
| NeonAlchemist 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseoh a great prequel to a great sequel ^.^ me likie! |
| honey-senpai 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuselife is soo cruel *tears fall like waterfall * soo sad but i loved it all the same |
| S. T. Nickolian 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseWah! I hate when Youko dies! I loved it though! ^^ |