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| Peace Mirror Of Souls 2008-06-13 ch 2,  | abuseUmm thats kinda really hard to follow. Whats up with focusing on the younger flock, and Gazzy/Nudge, EWW. Maybe you should reconsider that particular pairing, cause it kinda, sorta, REALLY sucks. And where is Max and the others, I dont think she'd just leave them to randomly fend for themselves. Might think of re doing it. |
| disneydork 2008-05-25 ch 2, | abuseThis is quite good! I really like it, please update soon! |
| anonymouse13 2008-04-13 ch 2, | abuseOkay. Angst angst angst. Yay! But I want to know how she cut her wings off... I would read this over again. Sometimes strange things happen when you upload a document, but there's one place where a sentence just leaves off in the middle, and then something completely different starts. Also: "social service's" shouldn't have an apostrophe, I don't think. But I'm glad you're continuing, because I really like this. Good job. |
| MellaIsi 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abuseI really really liked this. Is there going to be another chapter? |
| kiki1592 2008-03-04 ch 1, | abuseits rele good confusing to the max, but good |
| Darth Atkid 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseI liked it. The jerking feel definitely added to it. |
| anonymouse13 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseI really, really like it. I don't think they're technically OOC, because people change, you know, and it's obviously been a while since we've seen them. I also don't really mind the jerkiness- it flows in its own way, if that makes any sense. One question: Did Angel really chop her wings off? As in, literally? *shiver* |