Overall, this could be considered one of the closest to character stories I have read about Kushina. Granted, she never really gets any screen time, but since it has been stated that she is closer to Naruto's personality, this could come close. Anyways, this was great and I would like to make a request. Would it be possible to make a sequel to this that takes place in Shippuden? I feel that would be very intriguing to see how well mother and son cope with some of the events in that time-line, like the Invasion of Konoha or Rescue Gaara arcs. Anyways strong finish and great job, all.

Oh DAMN! TAKE COVER! the sh/it is about to hit the fan! XD

un is there a'nother coming?

should have had them get thare when thay clashed

she gets off the hook far to easy

*poom* TORPEDO IN THE WATER!

Kami, i hope he take it well..

hilarious!

I came into this story with high hopes, it's an interesting premise and has built emotional issues that are fascinating and very dramatic. Unfortunately the story never comes together for me. There's several things bugging me about this story.

What right does Kushina have to berate Kakashi and Jiraiya for not taking care of Naruto? Where the hell has she been? Kakashi may have dropped the ball a bit but he spent a majority of that time serving in ANBU, where presumably he has a lot of things to do. Jiraiya on the other hand has been running the intelligence network for Konoha, he's been traveling around the Shinobi world, pretty looking out for Konoha's interests. Yeah it's unfortunate that he didn't check in on Naruto every once in a while, but quite frankly the two of them seem to have far more legitimate reasons why they didn't take care of Naruto in comparison to his Mother who has been gone on a "mission" his entire life with not even a fare thee well. It doesn't make sense and the fact is Kakashi and Jiraiya should have reacted differently when they were confronted with it. It's okay if their guilty, there definitely should be some guilt, but the greatest amount of blame lays with Kushina.

I know Naruto has an almost inhuman capacity to forgive but this is ridiculous. There should have been some sort of anger. It doesn't have to be violent, it doesn't have to be over the top, he doesn't even have to scream at her, but there needs to be something, beyond a bitter sentence or two. The characters are no longer that interesting if their reactions and emotions are completely out of whack with all reasonable responses. Unfortunately Naruto is coming across as a bit of a two-dimensional character right now. Honestly the character's reactions are completely unexpected, and not in a good way, at times nonsensical and it really makes it hard to emphasize with any of the characters at this point.

The character's reactions and emotions are skewed and off-base. It really drags down the quality of this story. The quality of the writing is fine, but I just cannot get over some of the dialogue. I know I'm repeating myself at this point but I really feel I need to over-emphasize it at this point. I only read through chapter 10, so maybe there's some huge reveal in the next couple of chapters that I'm missing, but at this point it doesn't matter. There's no tension, no sense that Kushina has a big story to tell that excuses her in part. Instead all I've seen is some half thought up excuse that she was searching for family. Really, I don't recall one person asking her what she's been doing beside the gate guards, to which she responds with the lame "I was on a mission" answer, and Iruka, to who she repeats the same excuse. Maybe I'm missing something big, but as it is right now, it does not make sense.

Zoh! XD
This fic is adorable! I've been on a kushimina kick lately and a perso over on lj was kind enough to point me in the direction of your fic when I asked for some Kushina-Naruto centered fics. XD
I was not disappointed!
*faves and watches for more*

This was a pleasure to read beginning to end and I would be interested in reading a sequel should you ever feel inclined to return to the project. Thanks for this wonderful fic.

Haha, so the intervention will perhaps turn out to have significant effects on the storyline--teach me to review before getting to the end of a fic!

I loved this line and the hints about Kushina's friendship with Mikoto: "I’m doing this because you’re my friend’s son, not just because you’re my son’s friend.”

I can understand why you might not want to deviate from the original storyline, but then it calls into question why introduce Kushina into the plot at all if her entrance is not going to affect any outcomes whatsoever...

Ah, so much awesome stuff in this chapter--the encounter with Jiraiya, the way you work in Kushina's guilt and how her relationship with Naruto isn't perfect right off the bat in a way that keeps both her and Naruto in character. Much enjoyed.

The Kakashi POV was really awesome, and this one line might be my favorite ever: "And Naruto’s face, like he had just been hit by an exploding tag and an avalanche of ramen at the same time." So evocative and hilarious at once.

I really like how you dealt with a lot of serious issues here that Ifeel like canon glosses over--Kakashi became my least favorite character ever after it came out just how closely connected he was with the Fourth and then he left Naruto to the dogs like that without even a page of explanation from Kishimoto. So I'm glad that you not only address that, but in a way that shows how complex and flawed *all* the characters are because, after all, tehy are only human.

This chapter felt somewhat strained, and I realize that's partially because the first encounter between Naruto and Kushina had the entire premise of the fic riding on it. That first moment of recognition was done really well, but the constant interruptions that followed really detracted from it, for me anyway.