well love the suspense and action. u don't need to inprove on any of this!

good resreach! like it

i'm not going to stop reading!

i kinda see where this is going. so far there arn't any mistakes. u keep the action going on

I like the story and the idea, but how exactly are they controlling the others and not Yusuke.

Is their something special about Yusuke that makes him resistant to their powers. If so, you should probably address that at some point.