Wow! You really kept them both in character and a nice flow to the fic. Well done.

There was just one point I'd like to mention. In closing, Zuko notes that he's growing tired of haiku. However, the first poem you placed in the story isn't actually haiku - "it is summer" counts only as four syllables, rather than the traditional five.

But I really loved this. :) Great job.

~100-percent-HP-obsessed

AwfulPoet!Zuko is perhaps the best thing ever. XD As is this fic.

(Although my inner nerd kept screaming about how Mai should *technically* have replied with a tanka, but I am going to assume that she would find that practice ridiculous - and also that she's not any better at poetry than her boyfriend.)

Oh, they're so cute together! Zuko's such a dork, but damn if he can't be a romantic dork...ah, once again you have made my day.

The Pterodctyl

Oh wow! You've portrayed this couple wonderfully. Spot on characterizations here. I love your writing style as well, it really mirrored Mai's tone well throughout the piece. Excellent job! This was very cute and enjoyable, something I could definitely see this couple experiencing vividly.

Ah, Zuko just wouldn't be Zuko if he wasn't completely inept in the romance department, and you do a wonderful job of showing that, and still making it charming and funny. I can totally see him doing something like this, right up to practicing on inanimate objects (or maybe a frog).

I think my favorite like has to be Mai's absoulutely deadpan "Because I was hoping that you'd stop." Nicely done!

Very cute! Loved it! :3

WRITE MORE!

I loved that.

I read it last night on lj, and I was babbling incoherently. I love adorkable Zuko, and I knew exactly how Mai felt at the end. It's hard to put into words how much I loved this.

I'll just keyboard flail.

aww that was sweet

I love how you write Mai/Zuko. Please continue to create such wonderful stories.

One point though, at; "somehow hear the violent beating of her hear, or, at least, notice the dampness of her palms." Should it not be 'somehow hear the violent beating of her heart'? Not hear?

Anyway, this story is so realistic and your ability to stay true to your characters is why you are one of the best Avatar writers! Thanks!