Reviews for The Akashic Record

Dantaron
2008-03-05
ch 4,

abuse>_> I am heavily reminded of my old history textbooks. >D
You're right in that it was kind a narration style, a omniscient view in the truest sense - someone just dictating what happened. I... don't know if it was the most exciting of reads, but then I knew half the events anyway. XD I kept confusing it with my own quasi-version of events. o_o
Nonetheless, in terms of worldbuilding, you did great here - the concept of the Metamorphosis, instead of a Decree, that there'd be free will and all that - even though it talks of setting up events to restore the balance. Nonetheless, I really like that idea - and that souls, when they die, return to the Chaos to be bred anew into the world (reincarnation!!11shift).
Also, if the PM is an antagonistical to everything about the balance, in terms of trying to shift it into shadow, it would make sense that the puppet/string thing is representative of Fate.
Also, I like the idea of Regulus/Prince of Shadows being tainted trying to retrieve chaos? shadow? whatever it was he was after (that's one of the points it was kinda confusing). It's kinda cool, in terms of that there is a wildcard (well, not as much as Sigma - hay, is this taint genetic, per chance, and that's what 'causes the immorality thing? XD)
Hmm... also, it's kinda weird imagining Mihaele and Sthertoth still consciously existing inside the Angel - I always thought that when they merged, it was an all-out thing - body AND mind, and that the Angel's personality was a fusion of both Mihaele's and Sthertoth's, a perfect representation of the Void - not just Balance, but nothingness (she is the Angel of the Void, after all).
Nonetheless, overall you presented a very well-thought out mythology for the TSA world that lolz, actually works - and you also added in your own touches, like the creation of archangels/demons on both Mihaele and Sther's part (Abraxion!! also, Selfstealer is such a badass title). Also, I like the voice you've provided for the narrator - and that at that one point, he rebukes the reader for just wanting to have the knowledge to show off, etc. - you know, maybe Akashic (assuming that's who the narrator is) is a previous incarnation of Ashtarth? He totally has the voice for it, lolz, and he knows things no mortal really should.
Also, the image of the Knights' souls shattering and spreading like shards all throughout the Metamorphosis to be among mortals is badass. ^__^ (which still begs the question, what happens to Moira when her shard gets reunited with Bem?) ;_;
Which reminds me:

;_;
Anyway, very nicely done, Sora. ^_^ There was some narration issues where it wasn't that clear (or maybe that was just me XD) but still, I enjoyed it - and yey, TSA is fleshed out in one more respect, still. ^__^
I'll be reading, Sora, and I hope you're feeling better today~

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