|Reviews for It Was Wrong|
| divine.blue 1/8/11 . chapter 1
very well writen. I'm not sure why its in the Angst category but I enjoyed reading it. good job.
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel 7/3/10 . chapter 1
I like the concept and the dynamic between Derek and Casey.
Well written in my opinion and it definitely showed Derek in control.
| LivingVampire 5/31/09 . chapter 1
**fans self**. Wow. That was pretty hot!
| indefinitelyhigh 3/30/09 . chapter 1
I loved this :) Casey always had a thing for wrongs! I love it!
| Nikkix1421 1/15/09 . chapter 1
This was amazing. I normally don't go for the darker fics but there are a select few I do like. This is defiantly one of them; I only wish I found it sooner. I thought that you showed us exactly what you wanted the readers to see. I wouldn't change a thing about it, because it would change how you felt the story needed to be told. (Referring to the review a few down from mine.) The lines where you put the added emphasis on caller her 'sis'; I think it was necassary and the point you were trying to make when you wrote this. I just don't understand how someone could give you a negative review on your story and then feel the need to tell you that you need to explain why you did certain things. I really hope you didn't reply to them, especially since they couldn't even spell one of the main characters names right. Just my opinion.
I hope you have written more LwD stories, and I can't wait to read more of your work.
| daydreamer04 11/20/08 . chapter 1
I like it. Its darker yet still light in a way. (if that makes any sense.)
| AiriexChan 6/29/08 . chapter 1
Wow you got better at writing; I'm certainly shocked. I also cannot believe that I'm doing this. I'm giving a positive review to a fan-fiction.
I actually enjoyed this, despite the psudo-incest. You're very good at prose, love. But, as all good reviews go, I had a few issues with some of this fan-fiction. Allow me to state them now.
The part where you put "moved behind her to mold her back to his front" was quite unnecessary, if you ask me. The picture it produces in my mind, is not the same it may have produced in yours.
The part where you wrote "and couldn’t sound less convincing if she had tried" needs to be revised to something along the lines of "couldn't have sounded any less convincing if she had tried" unless you can prove to me just exactly why yours sounds better or how it makes sense.
The part where you wrote "He pulled her flush against him, making her gasp". I'm afraid I don't understand what this means. Could you explain it to me?
The part where you wrote "He bumped one of his knees inbetween her legs". I don't undertand what you were getting at here either. Well, I do know he placed his knee between her legs, but I'm not exactly sure of why you felt you should use the word bumping. Please, explain this to me.
And towards the last part where Derrick was saying things like "You like that, sis?" and "Do you like knowing your step-brother is above you?", I find this dialogue quite unnecessary.
Feel free to PM me and explain some of the parts I mentioned. I'd like that because it would help me understand the relevancy of some of these parts, and the meaning of others.
Other than that, good fan-fiction!
| Guest 4/16/08 . chapter 1
| jfdasklfdnamjn 3/21/08 . chapter 1
Kinda the darker side of dasey and such
i love that you acknowledged the fact that they are step-siblings and such so much more then other fics, and that casey and derek probably wouldn't just forget about that.
anyways, loved it, well written.\
| PinkDough 3/14/08 . chapter 1
that was cool
| AkomiNarazaki 3/9/08 . chapter 1
kinkay. lmfao. Haha, I like it :)!
| DayDreaming0f y0u 3/8/08 . chapter 1
That was wrong, but so right. I loved it! You couldn't have made it any better. Please write some more! This was my first LWD fic and it was amazing!
| briknowsbest 3/8/08 . chapter 1
Absolutely love it!
It's such derek-ness "SIS"
Hmph anywho great story
| xoPinkSugarox 3/8/08 . chapter 1
Interesting. Very interesting. I liked it, I think. lol. Conflicting emotions since I don't particularly like Dasey. But great job writing lol. :)
| Aqua88 3/7/08 . chapter 1
There might be NOTHING more that I love then a classic 'Family is asleep, UST filled Dasey room interaction'.
Great job. Perfection.