That was really good. Thank you for sharing.

nice

aww poor jake doesn't get the lady in the end of this book..

Goodness, reading this was hard. The ending was unbearable - Jacob's so anxious to find out what Bella'll finally say, then he gets all excited when she finally starts giving in and kissing him back...and then he gets his heart thrown in a blender. Ugh.

This, of course, was brilliantly written, as usual. I'm gald to see that you've gotten back into doing a bit of writing again - I missed reading your stuff. :D Hope to see more from you in the near future, though I know life can be unbearably busy sometimes. :)

I have often wondered what Edward could have said to Jacob to make him willing to come back and talk to Bella. This seems like it is very likely how that scene must have gone. Great job of capturing both of their emotions and characters in that difficult moment.

Well, not exactly your best work. This story was just so bland and boring compared to your other stories that were at least decent. Don’t worry, the very few punctuation errors didn’t detract from the “okay” story. Nice try though, not everyone is destined to be amazing writers!

Wow! That was so good! Please continue if you can, i'd really like to find out his point of view all the way to the point where Bella sat next to him on his bed and told him that she's choosing Edward.

Wow! Very insightful - I love 'Jake' even though many don't.

Excellent! I love this from Jake's POV. So nicely done. Always tears at my heart to see Edward unsure of himself and the future.

SSVD