Wow. That was without a doubt the most INVENTIVE concept for a fanfic that I've ever come across. The logic of your setting is unique, but within the world you created, it totally works! Plus, I'm a sucker for happy endings, and you managed to create one in a totally irrational but incredibly satisfying way. :D

Ordinarily, I end enthusiastic fanfic reviews by asking the author to "write more, please!" But in this case, you did things perfectly. You don't need to add anything more to this version of the L&O universe to make it better. And it would be kind of weird to continue this particular story as part of a series. There's a part of me that finds it sad that Lennie is stuck eating cornflakes by himself now (I miss Lennie!), but his situation seems like it wouldn't be as...malleable...as Claire's.

A wonderful story! :D *insert applause track here*

Wow. That was deep, beautiful, and unique. I enjoyed the part where the pitfalls of fan-fiction were explored...

I know this is an older story, but... I LOVED THIS! I was so entralled! Loved the going in and out of the fanfics, loved shout out to Hennessy's Jordan, loved the Claire/Lenny relationship, and of course loved Jack! It was great!

WELL DONE! :-)

Gil,

I love it! Lennie was right on the money and you summed up 99% of the Jack/Claire fic in this wonderful piece!!

Thank you for writing it!

LG

You already know that I love this story, but I thought I'd make it official!

I really like the way that you created a story that has a strong plot line flowing through it and simultaneously acts as an editorial commentary about the fanfiction world. You discuss a lot of the pitfalls and common errors found in fanfiction writing while bringing to life a very strong character. This is an excellent idea and a great execution! Well done!

PLK

neat concept. nice work making Claire sound confused yet still no idiot.

What a neat departure for you. Fun and an unexpected read.