AWESOME STORY!

Hm, this sucks. they're doomed...

Alright! THAT was awesome! If this was a movie... I'd watch it with popcorn, and that's saying something!

good chapter, but the ending was like an incomplete paragraph or something... you might want to consider putting a cliffhanger there to make the reader want to read the next chapter, or changing it a bit... just my opinion

TJ is one freaking awesome alien.

Poor Ali, she goes unconcious alot... and Trae needs to die... seriously... i hope he dies slowly and painfully... cuz... he's just plain retarded. its obvious Ali isn't human... DEAL WITH IT RETARD!... that would be what i would tell him...if i ever meet him...

i like how you slowly take the sad moment up top to a murder fest at the bottom... Ironic that the name Mary is 'holy', and Ali just killed her...

awesome name for the alien. Jordan does like dying... i know she loves acting it out anyways...lol... and... the Queen freaking rules. but I have a feeling this alien might... MIGHT be important sometime in the later chapters...

Hm, didn't see that coming. NOT. it kinda forshadowed like the paragraph before. Poor Jordan. you really are evil... thats cool that Ali is the 'boss' now...

Hm, good chapter. Liked it very much. A lot better. on the side comment: Jordan does have a pretty smile, but she never says so. seriously, ask her - she'll deny it. lmao. oh, love how Ali kills the C dude.

Hm, boring chapter. No offense. Trae is a rather dull character... I hope he gets out of the story soon. Ali better be all kick A*S again... or else... :0

I must say... You definately did a great job bringing Jordan's personality into this character Jordan... very nice job. Also, I'd like to say... "Well this sucks..." as my comment to this chapter. Finally get 'home' to find your friend dead... really sucks... but she got to meet this,, er.. Queen... hm, i smell forshadowing...something bad is going to happen... Jordan's going to be killed by a Xenomorph, isn't she?

That's rather... random... "oh we revived you back to life, but we're gonna let you go now..." doesn't really sound like something a guy like that would do...

gee just kill everyone at the company... forget the fact there might be innocent children there... LOL like the predators have a chance against ALIENS!... hm they dont have a chance against ALI anyways... lol XD great work!

EHMAHGAWD! I FREAKIN' LOVE THIS PART TO DEATH! WE MUST ACT THIS OUT ONE DAY! (LOL)