That was very good. You are quite accomplished.

such rude things for a ten year old girl. But i love it!

Hm. I really have a hard time picturing Hermione this petty, especially when the topic is dragged on throughout the whole one-shot. I like that you point out the ugliness of these thoughts she has, but still, it gets pretty old by the end of the fic.

From what we're given in 'Philosophers' Stone', Hermione didn't seem the type to linger on who's 'pretty' and who's 'ugly'; she seemed more inclined to ponder about more important things. I have an easier time seeing Ginny doing this (as shown in HBP), since she's the more 'girly' character.

It would have been more interesting to see Hermione hate these Barbie Dolls' personality, instead of *only* focusing on their looks.

I did like two lines from this, though:

"She reasons that this insane jealousy is not at all practical, that her daydreams will never amount to anything more than that which the confines of her strictly disciplined mind will allow, and it frightens her.

They’re too shiny, she thinks. They will blind one another with their perfect brilliance, the perfect glow emanating from their perfect selves.

Is one better off blind and shiny, or dull and blinded by those who shine?"

"She will never shine. She reflects light; a mirror, one might say. She will show the shinies what they are, and they will not care, and they will die blind and shiny, and she will die dull and blind, and she will not care."

- Carrot

Bitter and well written. Haven't we all felt that way at one point or the other? It's nice to see a princess story with some real envy in it!

I came across this from the link on yur lj...

You've probably heard this many times, but writing IS the best medicine.

Though it's short, this is just such a wonderful portrayal of hemrione's character, and what we see her become later on.

Wonderful! :)

You're very welcome! Writing is always great for getting things out. (And you get a lovely piece of work out of it too!)
"Oh, but damn those princesses." was the perfect end line.

aww...so sad

Firstly, I'm really, really honoured that you count me as inspiration. And I hope you're feeling better about everything. **hugs**

And haha...Badminton...my parents were both school champs at badminton. I was pants at it.

I like the way you've thought about Hermione before she came to Hogwarts, and explained her desire to shine academically. So yeah - this is a story for every little girl who's been excluded from the "cool group" at school.

And I love the (philosophical!) line "Is one better off blind and shiny, or dull and blinded by those who shine?"

You're welcome! but what did I do? :)
That is beautiful, did it by chance come from your lj?
"Is one better off blind and shiny, or dull and blinded by those who shine?" very lovely line, I love it! ;)
anie.

Oh, wow. This is beautiful. I mean, really REALLY beautiful. I wish I could write like this.

Poor poor ten year old hermione. Doesn't even know how special she is.

And I love how she thinks she won't be "shiny" but she wants to be and she wants somebody to MAKE her shiny, and that if she runs away it will solve all of her problems. And she doesn't even know what the future holds for her, not even that far away. :) It's absolutely BEAUTIFUL.

Wow. You wrote this really well, I love how Hermionie is wishes to be "shiny" and perfect, and, instead, is a mirror.

In the first line, "That’s right, ignore the little freak sat in the corner…" I think "sat" should be "sitting"?

I love her jealousy, especially of the sleek, shiny-haired girls.

~ Kyota

Oh, this is short but says a lot - I really like the way you've kind of keyed into that little bit of Hermione that just wants to be special in some way, that way she uses her intelligence as a defence as if she's trying too hard to prove who she is, that she's not this superficial girl at all (and yet we know there's a bit of her that really, really cares what people think).

I thought it was really nicely done :).

*huggles Bonnie*
This is about that girl, isn't it?
*laughs*
Writing is *always* the best medicine. =]

Anyway, this was beautiful (as always, Little Miss Poetic). I love how Hermione isn't quite so rational as always, how she's a little more ... normal ... I guess.

"Oh, that she could run away from them… she fantasizes of dancing all the way to Australia, stopping to rob a bank on the way and hiring a man to make her pretty. She would tippy-toe along all the rainbows, hair dye and straightening irons in hand as the sun beats down upon her pasty-white skin."

That's my favourite line(s), because you mention Australia and it's such a childish dream, you know, that you can run away and pay someone to make you perfect. =]

Awesome Bonnie.

-Cuba ...x