AH! I must read more of this! Please please please update! (hands a bunch of cookies) This is really interesting and you had me hooked from the very beginning! I love it!

Oh my god you've got me hooked! Off to the second chapter!

OMG :D
Still sick? I want you to know that this is exciting XD Really gets me going, you know?
Just one thing: you meant 'prologue' not epilogue right? Epilogue comes at the end (I think ^_^;)
But this is very very exciting indeed. Love to see more.

Wow, you've got something right here. It's not often that you see something like this with a completely original story line. I applaud you! I also await your next chapter. :3

I really like the way you described everything in the first chapter. Everything was detailed really well, I think.

~Konsui

...0_0 Whoa. InTENSE! You pulled off that scene very, very well - I was just about glued to the screen. I love that the Betrayers have so much *power*! I thought they were just ragtag dissidents - I didn't realise they were this *force*! AND THEY TARGETED VEXEN! *happy dance extraordinaire* And Marly! Isn't *he* the dashing, enigmatic creature? I look forward, very, very much, to wherever this may lead :D Brilliantly done, hun!

Just a quick note first off: did I just notice your avatar, or was it always that Reno one? Because I saw it an nearly died from laughing. Okay. Chapter now :D

...WOW. That is so freaking kickass, my dear! I *love* the idea of government dissidents, of this blank, mindwashed Vexen - of the real Vexen that's waiting underneath to be brought to life :) You described the censorship of society really well, the introduced dullness, and I love that there *are* people that rebel, it's not this ultimate reign, because humans *always* rebel against authority in some capacity or another. I love that the Betrayers are branded like that, and have absolutely no escape. Seriously awesome!

ARGH LIKE I TOLD YOU ON AIM I LOVE THIS STORY. :'D It's so original and I love the descriptions. :3

MOAR SOON PLZ. 8D