Hehe I like this. Sad to see you haven't continued with it for so long though.

I'm impressed by this trilogy of yours, are you going to write more?

This is by far the best Princess Mononoke fanfic I've read so far, well the triology as a whole considering this part only has one chapter so far. (which i think needs to be changed) i realize you haven't updated for awhile, but you can know that you'll have at least one reader waiting for another chapter :D

Wha? AH!! What happens next!?? >_<
Please update soon! I love your writing! You're very talented!

Humm... I hadn’t expected that. Well, I love a good twist and this has my full attention and I await eagerly to find out what will happen next.

Is this a sequel to Sympatric? If so, please give more chapters!

Yay! You absolutely made my day with this. ** seriously. Heehehehehee! (Sorry I didn't get the chance to check it until a few days after it came out though...)

Alrighty! So even in this first introductory chapter things are starting to burn. I am a big Kaya fan. I felt that she was one of the most undershowed and underappreciated characters in the whole movie. Hell, Toki's HUSBAND got more air time than Kaya did. Of course, in all clicheness Kaya should probably ask Ashitaka where her crystal dagger went... but! Ooh! I'm just SO happy that you started this. Probably happier than I've been with a fanfic in a long while. i can't wait until more comes out. Seriously.

Seriously Seriously.

Seriously.

Haha.

Warui, Warui na.

Er... Sorry. I'm just excited is all. OOH! Urgh! I want to give some criticism for some stuff, but I'm just so happy and excited that I can't! Rah! I'll have to get back to you on that.

Anyway, good stuff. Though your writing style isn't as descriptive or "creative" as some people's, I immensely enjoy it. There's an easy-going quality to the plainness of your style. It's simply read, but enjoyed, and though you don't really employ the use of many literary devices, the way your tale unfolds doesn't really leave room for them to be needed.

All in all, I loved it.

I can't wait for more.

I shall (unfortunately) be waiting until the next chapter.

And maybe, just maybe, I'll review you back with all that criticism that I'm just too happy to give you right now.

Mata na!

Kurenaida Mizuki


PS: Personally, I think that Yakuul looks better in writing, though Yakuru sounds better when spoken... Hrm... If I were writing a PM fic, I think it would be difficult to choose which one to use...

Update! Now!! This is already a great story. I've always thought Ashitaka leaving the village was one of the saddest scenes of the movie, and I can't wait hear your take on what's been going on with them. Poor Kaya! What happened to her?

looks good, but don't keep us in suspense! i hate cliffhangers, especially when the author doesn't update regularly(sp?)!

Is this an immediate sequel to "Journeys"? There's some kind of that. But I can't really tell.

First off, I'll say this is a different approach. I think there're too many stories that put Ashitaka on a pedestal & base the story on this noble character... In your story, I like the setting: it's not the usual Irontown & Ashitaka's character is set against a much more realistic backdrop. Call me un-romantic, but I don't like the fact that he's still pining for San. But it's good you made it subtle, not too obvious.

Next, you might want to work on your tone & mood. You should use the first 3 paragraphs to try to establish the tone for the story. But you're everywhere. My sense of Ashitaka in the story is scattered. Not only because he's meeting so many people, but because he's repeatedly doing things. There's too much small, possibly irrelevant action going on.

Last, I wonder how the 'small girl' knew his name. I have the impression Ashitaka is in foreign country, & probably he wouldn't give his name around. Perhaps better if she address him as "oni-chan" or something like that. That would help build his character as the helpful stranger who people he meets respect.