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| Weener1 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseWow! That was so full of awesome description~ The Hawaii sure sounds tasty!~ -Jay |
| Fade to Osaka 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseIt was good, and everyone was very in character (especially Yukari) but the spacing was kind of annoying. Keep writing! |
| Mr Xvious 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abusehaha! That was great, a really good read! keep it up! :) |
| EvilDux 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseI love this. It's awesome. :3 It's great to read something wholesome that isn't girl-on-girl slash(though I do like that too). I love how you described things, especially the photo. Really great mental picture that made me lol. Over all, it was pretty interesting. The only thing I would change in the future is the formating, as everything is squooshed together and my eyesight isn't that great to begin with. I look forward to your future works! ~'Dux |