It's been some time since I've read this story. My apologies as it can get pretty busy on this site sometimes.

Just remember to capitalize at the start of every sentence and at the beginning of every quote. It's the only slight error I found with this.

I hope this helps you in someway. :)

I read this prior but I also decided to check out your first story before commenting.

A little revision is needed but it's still a nice change of pace from the usual fics.