That was awesome. ^_^

thanks for posting... this is a great story... it's worth the readers time... though, you might want to look at this again and check for the spelling errors... thanks again...

You are not a particularly good hentai writer.

WAIT

...now, dont go ignoring the rest of this, cause my only problem with this is the second to last paragraph. With the way the rest of the story was written, and the manner in which the story flows, you would have been better altering the scene to give a convenient fade to black, picking it back up in the last paragraph. It would have made the story from a 6/10 into a 9/10. It would also give it a T rating...although you may want to keep it at an M for "suggestive situations".

Congratulations! Your first story was a worthy submission, you should be pleased. But if you are like most every writer I know, they are never satisfied. The more you write the more proficient you will become and the more profitable your returns will be... it gets easier, as do the accolades.

Good work. I look forward to what you'll write in the future.

aww that was so adorable even for a 1 chap fic well done mate

There were a number of places where I thought you did an extremely good job on showing Kim and Shego's inner conflicts. Congrats on your first fiction posted here.

KiY